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Batman vs Premanition
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6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 09-05-05 at 12:36 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Batman has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-02-05 12:38 PM.
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Premanition has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-02-05 12:40 PM.
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In the shadow of the spider……...since that first kiss kid
Bats are blind, so you deciding which punch to miss with So you super? A hero? With a record pro-found ZERO you speechless cos Im burnin ya sound like program nero Lazy bitch, you a metaphoric vegetable ~ a couch potato You bats only hang upside down so the slouch is greater ‘White guys neva sounded so good’, ah finally some sense but in the team of white cats you don’t even make the bench shadowed like torch in tents, less head than tails on pence forget key to your success beta acquire a spanner & wrench beat me with your eyes closed, no you on ya back changed that damn structure but you still plain wack |
oh shit im gittin into it so u better run
they'll be feedin u threw a tube wen im done your as gay as john cena wearin that chain wit the lock* maybe tha UK wouldnt be so embarassed if u wouldnt suck so much cock** everything u be writtin is a big fuckin bore i wouldnt treat u this way if u wasnt my whore yo why did u have to come and battle me maybe cuz u a vet who cant beat anyone but a newbie explanations:*john cena is a wrestler who wears a chain that has a lock on it **in his profile it says he is from the UK |
nice verse mayne.....uppin for votez.....holla at shya boy
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Voted For: Premanition
v/premanition...your structure was okay but your punches were weak.. u need to elevate on your punchlines and you gott make your verses alot more personal... batman...you need to have your structured fixed and keep the lines the same..your personals didnt really make sense..its good that you explained but u gott elevate on it... ...you got eminem on your signatures..hes great , dont make him look bad by throwing weak punches... |
Voted For: Premanition
hahaha man i gotta give this shit to PREM MAN jusy way more personals its self explanitoy but i have too explain here it is PREM: his structure didnt drag "In the shadow of the spider……...since that first kiss kid Bats are blind, so you deciding which punch to miss with" ^^ nice opener str8 personal So you super? A hero? With a record pro-found ZERO you speechless cos Im burnin ya sound like program nero Lazy bitch, you a metaphoric vegetable ~ a couch potato ^^nothin spectacular but still was a direct hit wit personal. "but in the team of white cats you don’t even make the bench shadowed like torch in tents, less head than tails on pence forget key to your success beta acquire a spanner & wrench beat me with your eyes closed, no you on ya back changed that damn structure but you still plain wack" ^^^ loved the endin man WERD nice flow to it with structure and vocab with persoanls man!!!!!hit em hard with a haymaker conclusion!!! VS. BATMAN: "oh shit im gittin into it so u better run they'll be feedin u threw a tube wen im done" ^^this opener was i kinda weak man WERD and fix that structure man...no hate though like ur creativity. "your as gay as john cena wearin that chain wit the lock* maybe tha UK wouldnt be so embarassed if u wouldnt suck so much cock** ^^this was one out of two of ur good punches and personals man...liked ur creativity again man but again work on that structure... "yo why did u have to come and battle me maybe cuz u a vet who cant beat anyone but a newbie" ^^^liked this finisher man nice wordplay and personal punch...... but overall punches,personal: PREM creativity: BATMAN V/PREM!!! |
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Voted For: Premanition
Aye u got my vote nic eshit...good punches...sorta.. but they wernt fluent, and didnt flow that well into each other...look a nigga up 4 a battle |
Voted For: Premanition
oh shit im gittin into it so u better run they'll be feedin u threw a tube wen im done ^^^No Weak opener your as gay as john cena wearin that chain wit the lock* maybe tha UK wouldnt be so embarassed if u wouldnt suck so much cock** ^^^No Wack..... everything u be writtin is a big fuckin bore i wouldnt treat u this way if u wasnt my whore ^^^No WEak... yo why did u have to come and battle me maybe cuz u a vet who cant beat anyone but a newbie ^^^WAck CLoser n the shadow of the spider……...since that first kiss kid Bats are blind, so you deciding which punch to miss with ^^^Ight opener So you super? A hero? With a record pro-found ZERO you speechless cos Im burnin ya sound like program nero ^^^Good Lazy bitch, you a metaphoric vegetable ~ a couch potato You bats only hang upside down so the slouch is greater ^^^Nice ‘White guys neva sounded so good’, ah finally some sense but in the team of white cats you don’t even make the bench ^^^LOL....Funny punch shadowed like torch in tents, less head than tails on pence forget key to your success beta acquire a spanner & wrench ^^^Ight beat me with your eyes closed, no you on ya back changed that damn structure but you still plain wack ^^^Decent closer V/Prem....this was a onesided battle prem came wit better punchs structure personals an vocab.....Batman u came weak elevate....u need to work on everythin punchs an personals.....No hate.....V/prem RTF OR THIS VOTE WILL BE REMOVE.......1 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...d.php?p=2423063 |
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