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Sin`cere vs .Lola Cruez. II
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Topical Battle: Casualties of a dice game 20-30 Lines Explain votes only No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 300 Check in by: 09-07-05 at 11:00 PM Must drop verse in 7200 minutes after check in. Win by forfeit |
Sin`cere has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-03-05 02:42 PM.
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For the makings of a game we also might lose some fame & glory As I tell u a quick expectation of the Casualties of a Dice Game story . . . Charles had the dices in his hand, he blew in his palms, lady luck was there Got cocky that he was getting hundreds, so he had an idea that he didn’t even care Had his year savings in his pocket that he just got from the bank account Wasn’t careful what he did…. so he put all of his money to the pot count Put like 2 thou at stake, all of his money was in, no turning back He was going against 2 people and..........he got thrice the stack Went home to sell everything he had for more and more money in the pot Then there were 4 people in the game to win the money he threw his shot *dices rolled* One landed a two and the other a five….he won again, he was up a mil Then two other people came ‘round tha block wit a suitcase and they were real They said we both got 2 mil here put ur mil in, and the other 4 were looking And this game got really hot, the dark sun sweating there faces, really got cooking He still needed to get another mil so he took everything he owned and sold it Didn’t have nothing left his life was in a roll, he went back and the mil he showed it *6 mil game starts* So the game would go the first to get a seven or an eleven would win The odds were against him it was 2 against 1...so his chances were slim Though he was confident, it was his turn to roll and got a 2 and a 4 Got frustrated there his heart bumping faster, it was the other guy to roll They both didn’t get it so his chances grew a lil’ bigger........ rolled again And the thing is that this round was to get the high # so he wanted a ten He was really confident so he gripped his right hand, sweat tears falling from his eyes And the dices bounced, bounced and knocked each other and landed a…… Snake Eyes He automatically loses all and when he saw that he quickly took his money back Then they got they got they guns out and BANG!!! Ripped open his life from his back . . . Was a sad story but never get cocky as I teach u this what I saw in me Cuz if u don’t learn then u just might turn to be the next Dice Game Casualty |
What up?..............................................
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nothin whats wit u i already dropped.....hahaha....so go check....
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.Lola Cruez. II has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-06-05 04:44 PM.
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he waits patiently in the deep grass and he smells the wet ground with out making an sound, then he hears a utter load loud noise pound he see's you and your sweating and he can taste and feel your fear as you move the whistling of the leaves draws him closer. He’s near actually running for your life, tree's around you making funny faces "I've gots to get out of this place" He comes closer as you paces weird sounds echo's in your ear, ask yourself "Can I really get out?" The smell of the swamps where bodies lay. You might be next now screaming while the alligators sink their teeth in you, but did it happen? All you remembered was the bullet ripping your torso ..................."You've lost" tell me how does it feel to hunt/kill a human? *Rolls the Dice...Number 1 displays...* O he's a tough one, you knew he was one, when you caught him. The feeling excites you when he running with a smile instead a grim With only a knife as his only weapon but manage to kill all 5 people The 1st was walking around alone, and screamed when the .................................................S harp blade went into his pupil The 2nd when he started his ATV and blew up into inferno flames The 3rd when he couldn't take it no more with his own gun and aims The 4th when sleeping, cutted the head off without screaming. R.I.P. The 5th one the one who you dearly loved as you saw your son bleed. How does it feel to stand alone in this game, are you scared? be cautious. It seems that the game you've created it's about to have it first losses At first you was a leader but now you stood alone in the abyss of lonesome He broke every piece of glass now you stand nonexistent, in a bad glum You putted yourself in this, you picked the contestant. now your being hunted How can you bear this longer, knowing he isn’t going to stop till you are sainted You've created something so divine but now it grew thorns and your being punctured Quick as Lightening He is, But Splits your heart while you scream like loud thunder You hold the dice in your hand and the outcome is your life has been shaded. Shaded into a soul, to the pits of hell. Where you'll be anguish and punished Game is over, and the winner is the challenger, sadden that you couldn’t beat him Now you lay in a pool of blood, chances of you playing this game now is slim ......FUCK YOU! LOL. |
uppin............................................. .....
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he waits patiently in the deep grass and he smells the wet ground
with out making an sound, then he hears a utter load loud noise pound makin an sound....lol.... but nice lola...upppin this shit finnaly u dropped.....lol..... |
Voted For: .Lola Cruez. II
Sin'cere-Good topical here.Concept was unoriginal to me tho.As when you look at the title "causualties of a diss game"..the whole game/losing it and then dieing is the first thing you think of.This kinda topic kinda needs a metaphoric plot.And I Don't think you really stayed on topic for the whole thing though. "They said we both got 2 mil here put ur mil in, and the other 4 were looking And this game got really hot, the dark sun sweating there faces, really got cooking" ^^The 2nd line...just seemed to be outta place.Like..didn't have much relevance.It seemed to be there...but for nothing.In topicals..all the lines must tie to the topic somehow.Just as in battles..there can't be any filler. Tweety-Ok..concept was better than sin'cere's.U described the stuff better and shit in my opinion.Only problem..was that ur flow was awful.And I mean awful.Like 90% of the lines were stretched.And this ain't poetry..so flow matters.But the content was a full blow out.A lot more complex and was easier to picture in my opinion.Though you seemed a bit shakespearish at times.But overall...it was good. Vote-tweety for droppin a more complex peice RTF BELOW................. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206909 |
Thank you Deranged...But I'll get you for calling me over-rated Topical Head :(
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It was joke........the most overrated topical head...is me :thumbup: better? :kid: |
HEHEHEHEHEHEHE...Yes that's better........*sigh* I'm going to bed...Bye GoodNight.
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umm....no RTF?................................... :(
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aight......up..................................... .
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