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~Bless~ vs. Shodown
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Check in by Wednesday Pieces due by Friday Voting closes by Sunday Topic: Sky Is The Limit * If you think that one of the pieces in this battle should go into the Pieces of Inspiration thread then please state which piece in your vote. * |
CHECKIN HOMIE werd!!!!!
AYO SOLO IS IT THIS FRIDAY THAT ITS DUE?!?!?! |
yes, checkins are do this wednesday, and pieces due this friday......if need be you can have an extension granted till saturday, but you have to pm one of the mods for that
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yea ma sure will............damn i like the topic too................but who bless?!?!?!?!
never heard of him?!?!?!?or her?!?!?!?!?! |
check check, g/l homie
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Extension granted till Saturday
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Matured in a sullen atmosphere suffused with rue and misery Sin throughout a concrete jungle forsaken by society Layoff & casualty rates enlarging in drastic numbers For years, was the setting where I layed my head to slumber Cash Flow's sluggish since Im inactive in employment Bills approaching swiftly & my girl is 2 months pregnant Displeased over refractory lifestyle assigned before me If things dont change, then I must make alters at my own efficacy . . Sought after dealing as a way to elude my penury Assaying to reduce asperity from me and my family Now able to pay requisite to get us situated Nice extent of remnants, no more concerns of living squalid Knew dealing was a losing game, constantly inauspicious Where I reside, to survive, it depends on your riches Skeptical it'll occur, persisted augmenting my profit Thought if the game was craftily played, the sky is the limit . .....But I Was Wrong..... . Supined in my own blood, trembling widly on the pavement Anxiously awaiting god to rule the verdict of my judgement Pleading mercy, dont want my girl afflicted with anxiety Dont want my seed to mature deprived of father exemplary Foresaw death or confinement was certain to occur But still ignored & elongated till it taken me under If this day marked my demise, it was devised in God's plan Awaiting my verdict as I abjure my soul in your hands *Passes Out* . Day Later, Awakes In A Hospital Bed, Then Recites A Prayer . Dear God, I'm so thankful my second chance was granted And I swear in oath to use this chance to my advantage I'll make the best of this opprotunity as long as im alive The Sky is the Limit from here, nothing gonna stop my drive . . Amen |
skies the limit, so i reach for the stars
the more i rech the more it gets far.... stuck in a wicked time of sense,imagery confused times of abandonment scars appear,mind defused treachory of pain yet still ya yonder beyond imaginable illusion,still i wonder consider it a test yet i still try my best not ever giving up so quick,lay my mind to rest ...........slowly thinkin........... higher times of lifes own conception deluted and depleted scenes injected rejection of glory still lost in the water start swimming through blood,life gets more harder charter of skillz yet still in doubt of one in doubt of your self unsure,past not gone towards lifes games you stay strong no matter fighting your own fight....serve it on a silver platter crazy mind of games, gems of jewels...treasure island your imagination runs wild...nevermind....lost island ..........DAWN.........12 midnight......... still awake lookin at the stars...not giving up all this stuff..you cant make it and such sshhhh............be quiet and yet still. dont move or make a sound stop!....CHILLZ shivers down your spine cus you know you made it lookin back at life...people who didnt believe you'd make it... so now you've proved them wrong....your dreams succeeded! the sky is the limit..............just dont go over......and ecxeed it! RUSHED TOPICAL!!!! nice drop ~bless~ |
My vote has to go to Blessed
Blessed-Your verse wass iight, i feel your structure was presented well...I was able to create a good flow in my head..Ur imagery and emotion was on point and i felt it helped me go along iin your piece.Vocab i felt was good, used some good wording...although i do feel some of your lines were forced rhymes (first 2 lines) but overall a solid drop. Shodown-Your verse was quite basic. Your verse was not well structured.Being that way i was not able to create a good flow while i was reading it.Your imagery and emotion was just about average nothing too enhanced nor special.As for your vocab i feel you could up on that seeing in this verse it was quite basic. |
aight yo...........man werd and uppin this homnie!!!
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meh, at only 1 fuckin vote!!!
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~Bless~ Wins 1-0.
This Battle Is Now Closed. |
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