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Willa 09-05-05 02:48 AM

"SE7EN" ft. Will Appear, Sick.I.Am, Oreo, Ysdat, MeTaFo & Extract,
 
[[Intro]]
"O moral Gower, this book I directe
To the and to the, philosophical Strode,
To vouchen sauf, ther nede is, to correcte,
Of youre benignites and zeles good." - Troilus and Criseyde (Book 5, l. 1856-1859)

[[Verse One: Oreo - Envy]]
the dream of my team having limitless and endless funds
as much green in our pockets that bob marley had in his lungs
to drive someone else rolls royce, i couldnt pick if its my chioce
to have nas's meaning, jay-z's fame, jadas streets, an ludas vioce
to forget rap truth and just try to get mainstream, light burden turn heavy
no matter what color our skin pigment is,we still end up green in envy

"From The Soul Of A Saint Lies The Devil's Hand Ripping Benieth The Surface Of Virtue." - The Inner Sinner (0 B.C. - Infinity)

[[Verse Two: Sick.I.Am - Anger]]
i cant sleep... thoughts consume my mind... paralized
another dark night of anxiety... another dawn of lies
my rage is not yet realized... i assume its depression
cant bring myself to realization... no chance of confession
my obsession with hatred... overcomes all emotion
anger is my escape... as i sit at night... eyes wide open
fists in my wall... four words have provoked me
to put this life line around my neck... 'let it choke me'

[[Verse Three: Atticus - Lust]]
Suspect Of The Flesh... Just Fuck,Time To Run, Rest
Next To My Wife. Light Touches At The Suns Crest
Against Our Faces, Yet, Mine Cowers A Plague,
A Secret She's Yet To Assume As It Devours The Sane.
Day Who Knows Of This Affair, Wife May Know. Aware
Of The Fact That This Is Adultary Hits. Sudden Rush, Now Hair
Stands On Its Ends On A Tether Line Euphoria Bust,
Pushed To Ends Wits For This Addrenaline Rush... Such Is I, My Historia... Lust.

[[Chorus x2]]
Apon My Body I Run
Hands Side To Heart, Start Up Down, Now Ive
Become One As God's Son.
In This Moment Hope's Kiss Is An Inate Blessin
When I Cant Seem To Escape The This Rape, Sex... Sin.

[[Verse Four: Will appear - Sloth]]
what im doing is wrong but i'll continue my life of acedia
I dont see God's light i see the flashing lights of a media
Committed to Crhyme now its too late for me to turn back,
the inking of God on my bck dashed as C.S. covers that.
Absenense in Christianity they look down in bourgeoisie
Decree and now my own peple wont accept me yet i plea
i dont agree why can;t different manklind be entwined
the love of my life isnt white God is love really blind?

[[Verse Five: .Extract. - Pride]]
I look at myself in a third eye….. I was an old guy
Seing every perspective through my youths disquise
It began with stick ups jack moves weed and quick fucks
Fast bucks and blast nuts and shaft guts In big ass sluts.
Staying decked out cause cream was everything
Wu tang gave it slang but it ment the same thing
Wanted what I saw on tv… Cuban links and rings.
I was 18 a young kid never knew the error of my ways
Till the error cost me my friends ends bitches and a prison stay.

[[Chorus x2]]
Apon My Body I Run
Hands Side To Side, Up Down, Now Ive
Become One... Im God's Son.
In This Moment Hope's Kiss Is Inate Blessin
When I Cant Seem To Escape The Rape, Sex... Sin.

[[Verse Six: MeTaFo' - Greed]]
They say Your foolish if you ever bite the hand that feeds.....
'Cause what goes around comes around, My mentality is greed
offer'd handouts, Tried to take the mans route, left my mind in doubt
Now My waters run deep...I'm Leavin peoples pockets with a drought
You know what i'm about...Plan to take over and start expandin
Started out hustlin the streets and gettin paper by demandin
Went from rags too riches, My business partner was Stabbed....
not with a blade, Just in the back 'cause i took everythin he had!

[[Verse Seven: Ysdat - Gluttony]]
packets open, animals murdered like rabbits chocken
A savage spoken thru abundance of preservatives demolished
hunger's apparent, but scraps find a bin then quickly abolished
A solid peice of food could serve a family of four
But some prefer to be served lavish,pefect not raw
We adore a full plate,a fools fate is orange with despise
No self control,your health will blow and the devil will rise
gluttony suprise,asked if he is full and he lies
taking more than he needs, in his mind is were he stores stomach's greed.

[[Closer]]

"Amung The Whitest Vail Drips A Black Tear Of Purities Decline.
Why Do We Fight The Devil, The Evil? This Force For Wich We Fear.
Together We Stand A Family Of Crhyme... Allow Sin's Nurture Of Years." - Crhyme Sindicate

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Links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2411494

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2411503

atticus had it too small so i reposted it
drop a link and at least one person from C.S. will leave you some feed :thumbup:

Sick. 09-05-05 10:12 AM

^^ much better size than before.. now people can actually read it

Dickard. 09-05-05 10:40 AM

^I respect this piece, very good drop from all of you....had good flow good vocab good imagery good emotion, i would break it down and be more specific but im simply too lazy.....yea so 8/10 peace

OrEo da cookie 09-05-05 01:42 PM

thanks^^^ finnaly some one reads it..poeple be lazy

King Solo 09-05-05 01:48 PM

good piece right here.

a nice topic for an open mic and each person brought their own individual hotness to it. flow was on point throughtout the entire piece and each verse was pretty much as good as the other. everyone involved put up some good shit so it wasn't one of those inconsistent collabs where some parts are dope and others are ok or wack. the emotion in the piece was a high, helped to put some nice imagery to the piece, ya can really picture the whole thing in your mind. vocabs was the only thing that wasn't near on perfect, that was the only inconsistent part I could see as some people didnt come as complex as others. but still a real nice piece and overall i give it 8/10.

atti? 09-05-05 01:59 PM

Thanks Alot For Giving Actual Feedback Solo,

I'll Be Sure To Personally Return The Favor On One Of Your O.M.'s
... So I Know You Get Adequite Feedback

Thanks Again.

Kawn Flixx 09-06-05 12:49 PM

Hmm...this was a pretty dope drop..i liked the topc of seven deadly sins.. it was really entertaining .. i was really feeling it..structure was okay it could have been alittle better but it was good ..and nice wordplay and vocab .. i felt orea and extract's could have been alittle better.. but it was overall a very good drop.. nice peice ya'll keep it up

Willa 09-06-05 11:47 PM

thank you bone colector i left feed on 4 of your open mics i appreciate the feed thank you

GrEeN PaRtY! 09-07-05 12:31 AM

Wow, this is a great collab, you guys all have a different style and take in this piece, you each bought your own style to it, seeing as you all did well with each one you were given i wouldn't be able to pick a favorite here, you all had som creative touches to it. Overall 9/10

Willa 09-07-05 05:50 PM

thanks for the feed i left some feed on your battle for you

Ysdat 09-07-05 08:20 PM

TCS!

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Willa 09-07-05 11:48 PM

hell yea dont nobody want none

anxiety 09-08-05 12:02 AM

Verse 1-Terrible Flow, other than that I still wasn't feelin it that much...
Verse 2- Boo the suicidal bullshit...
Verse 3- Dope, flow and all, just dope...
Chorus- Pretty good as well...
Verse 4- Good job willa, but what the hell is ---->bourgeoisie
Verse 5- I liked this verse as well, uneven lines kills flow though...
Verse 6- Started out dope... Middle lines were kinda weak, then you had a dope closer that went with the topic, good job...
Verse 7- Really good job here as well...

Good job guys..

diman 09-08-05 01:00 AM

this shit was a good ass collab, the many voices collected made this piece real hot, trust. the bars were limited, but the skill wasnt. yall had some good bars, greed and gluttonty was fire for sho. keep it up yall...chryme sin, one.

Willa 09-08-05 01:23 AM

bourgeoisie is the difference between upperclass and lower class lol
thanks for the feed anxiety you need feed left on anything?


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