Death vs Batman
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 09-06-05 at 12:12 PM

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Death has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-06-05 11:32 AM.

Batman has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-06-05 11:34 AM.

Ill burn BATMAN of his wins... call this a ROBIN
its like murdering cows.. the way i got this BEEF STOPIN

this dude BLOWS on the mic, he must think its COCK
my guns to this fag like a MOVIE.. Im seeing CLIPS n DROPS

151 posts, and im still more of a vet
ill send bullets like AIR... so they STORE IN YA CHEST

my raps will RING IN YA SLEEP... so CALL THIS A DREAM
its like you wearin HOT PANTS.. cause i make u SCOULD AT THE SEAMS

ten lines is enough to murk this jerk.. ive left him hurt
ill leave this WORM dead.. its about time he SLEPT IN DIRT

yo maybe this muhfuckas death will be by a bat bite
u say im the whackest and u were almost right
cuz tha only one wacker than me is ur bitch ass
ur rymes are to simple ill shatter you like glass
i hear that u might be the next big thing,but imma clean ur clock
tha next biggest thing that u see will in ur mouth and itll be my cock
yo this muhfuckers 20 and he wants to battle sumone 7 years yunger
ill quench ur thirst with cum and use my dick to end your hunger
you said that in an hour u could write 1000 linez
but im tha one who could cuz im a lyrical mastermind

Voted For: Batman

yo maybe this muhfuckas death will be by a bat bite
u say im the whackest and u were almost right
7/10...good opener

cuz tha only one wacker than me is ur bitch ass
ur rymes are to simple ill shatter you like glass
8/10...good punch

i hear that u might be the next big thing,but imma clean ur clock
tha next biggest thing that u see will in ur mouth and itll be my cock
6/10...not feeling dis sounds gaii

yo this muhfuckers 20 and he wants to battle sumone 7 years yunger
ill quench ur thirst with cum and use my dick to end your hunger
6/10....sounds gay agen but its a good punch

you said that in an hour u could write 1000 linez
but im tha one who could cuz im a lyrical mastermind
8/10 good closer....good punch




Ill burn BATMAN of his wins... call this a ROBIN
its like murdering cows.. the way i got this BEEF STOPIN
9/10 good opener....good punch

this dude BLOWS on the mic, he must think its COCK
my guns to this fag like a MOVIE.. Im seeing CLIPS n DROPS
......6/10......didnt feel dis line..

151 posts, and im still more of a vet
ill send bullets like AIR... so they STORE IN YA CHEST
5/10.......no punches

my raps will RING IN YA SLEEP... so CALL THIS A DREAM
its like you wearin HOT PANTS.. cause i make u SCOULD AT THE SEAMS
5/10......didnt feel dis da much

ten lines is enough to murk this jerk.. ive left him hurt
ill leave this WORM dead.. its about time he SLEPT IN DIRT
8/10 good closer nice punch

ma vote goes to batman for he had better punches n flow structure....

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eh.... definately looks like i aint posting on this site no more.. what kinda whack break down is that? he on ur AIM or some shit.. LOL newbies

Voted For: Batman

wow at this battle......

batman was ok, nuthin too special really, not overly creative with the punches but had some mediocre ones that had a little hint of humour. the flow was aight until the end where you began to stretch fuck outta ya lines, wordplay was minimalist shit really and the rhyme scheme was kinda bland and plain. up ure shit.

Death......u showed me a true definition of a herb verse, the structure was herb like, the fact that you capitalised ure rhymes was gay, the punches were a joke and near enough every concept used was played to fuck, u had next to no wordplay and nuthin in ure verse seemed creative to me. up ure shit lots.

V/ - Batman for a better verse overall.

This was feedback posted for Batman
 

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thanx mayne...appreciate it...fo real...uppin this shit once again

This was feedback posted for Death
 

better verse you get this murked him.................

yeah man death u suck man.....u talk amd shyt u lusin homeboy dont start accusing shyt u suck point blank 1

Voted For: Batman

BATMAN
yo maybe this muhfuckas death will be by a bat bite
u say im the whackest and u were almost right
^good reference to my battle, but u didnt throw a punch0/10^
cuz tha only one wacker than me is ur bitch ass
ur rymes are to simple ill shatter you like glass
^ok punch, got right to the point 4/10^
i hear that u might be the next big thing,but imma clean ur clock
tha next biggest thing that u see will in ur mouth and itll be my cock
^lol i like this line, made me laugh good punch 6/10^
yo this muhfuckers 20 and he wants to battle sumone 7 years yunger
ill quench ur thirst with cum and use my dick to end your hunger
^good use of words...lol weirdo but still good punch 7/10^
you said that in an hour u could write 1000 linez
but im tha one who could cuz im a lyrical mastermind
^show proof he siad that or its a fake punch 4/10^
OVERALL:ur verse was filled with semi punches that hit at the medium level...u attempted to add a personal but it could be fake unless u show a link.......overall prob. ur best battle....good job

DEATH
Ill burn BATMAN of his wins... call this a ROBIN
its like murdering cows.. the way i got this BEEF STOPIN
^good wordplay, yet weak diss 3/10
this dude BLOWS on the mic, he must think its COCK
my guns to this fag like a MOVIE.. Im seeing CLIPS n DROPS
^ehh not feelin thil line not very hard punch 3/10^
151 posts, and im still more of a vet
ill send bullets like AIR... so they STORE IN YA CHEST
^niether are vets, and that line is played 0/10^
my raps will RING IN YA SLEEP... so CALL THIS A DREAM
its like you wearin HOT PANTS.. cause i make u SCOULD AT THE SEAMS
^ehh, not a hard punch had no meaning...0/10^
ten lines is enough to murk this jerk.. ive left him hurt
ill leave this WORM dead.. its about time he SLEPT IN DIRT
^ok multis but basic punch weak and played 1/10^
OVERALL:I wasnt feelin this verse, i felt that u came weak and that some of ur punchess were played andmeaningless...just my opinion

v/batman

rtf if u havent already

Voted For: Death

Ill burn BATMAN of his wins... call this a ROBIN
its like murdering cows.. the way i got this BEEF STOPIN
Like everyone who has battled him hasen't used a robin line almost exactly like that... and the second line is unoriginal.

this dude BLOWS on the mic, he must think its COCK
my guns to this fag like a MOVIE.. Im seeing CLIPS n DROPS
...No.

151 posts, and im still more of a vet
ill send bullets like AIR... so they STORE IN YA CHEST
What the fuck does post count have to do with anything? And the second line was more glorification...bad wordplay.

my raps will RING IN YA SLEEP... so CALL THIS A DREAM
its like you wearin HOT PANTS.. cause i make u SCOULD AT THE SEAMS
...Nope. Still not hitting hard.

ten lines is enough to murk this jerk.. ive left him hurt
ill leave this WORM dead.. its about time he SLEPT IN DIRT
Gah. No.


yo maybe this muhfuckas death will be by a bat bite
u say im the whackest and u were almost right
Ehh...Nah.

cuz tha only one wacker than me is ur bitch ass
ur rymes are to simple ill shatter you like glass
Not so original.

i hear that u might be the next big thing,but imma clean ur clock
tha next biggest thing that u see will in ur mouth and itll be my cock
On the first time you should've used a 'time' line for that clock, but that would've been original. Okay.

yo this muhfuckers 20 and he wants to battle sumone 7 years yunger
ill quench ur thirst with cum and use my dick to end your hunger
Age don't matter. Second line, nah.

you said that in an hour u could write 1000 linez
but im tha one who could cuz im a lyrical mastermind
...Nah. :\

I'm giving it to Death for more originality and creativity, and an attempt at wordplay.


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This was feedback posted for Batman
 

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