My Sins My Sins Ft Ysdat, Sin'cere, L*F*S The Great, -Cezar-, Paranoid
 

BoneCollector
I tried to stop, but i couldnt....I always did wrong
I would ride with my people & be out all night long
Walkin with a limp my gun in my pants,riding deep
Having enemy's left and right,gettin hard to sleep
Have one eye open at all time,..just to feel aware
Have Fun making your enemy's fear..& walk on air
Smoking Blunts..and Selling Tree's,...Its what i do
Having Shells stick to people heads like crazy glue
Making People swim with the fishes,Cus of a color
People falling,& watch there life span grow smaller
I cant change what ive done,Its my sins,...my life
Cus only time,ill settle down,is when i have my wife

Paranoid
Livin with stressin, a blessin to be honored by fate
At least I had chances, frustrated when I’d try hate
Proceedin with caution, protected my feedin passion
My sentence left empty, petrified by bleedin fashion
Donated with intoxicated organs of human particles
Pronounced a problem, profound from news articles
Give me just one moment, or seconds to taste a flavor
Predictin shame, & conflictin fame, too waste a favor
My sins captured, dissolved by all the abusive people
And I’m defined wrong, so I’m known horribly lethal
Tragically thrown, magically blown over the facts
So they understand my sin, and complete my tasks

-Cezar-
I was born to a Life of Crime,Speakin through my ryhmes
Dad gone at the wrong time,So I settled for nicks N dimes
Moms cared but wasnt around,My life like a lost and found
Crazy as it sound,My whole life was mainly shifting down
At school causin problems,Made my moms life a living hell
Cant seem to solve them,Rap was onlything keepin me from jail
Denial it seemed I act,I have love for my fam and that was fact
Seemed like I kept leaving the station but forgetting my tracks
I swear if I could take everything back,This wouldnt be me
Wish my Sins would get lost in its tracks,So my mom could see....

LFS The Great
Living a life of sin, not because of my action but metaphorically,
Simply tryna be me but riduculed by unwritten rules given to me,
Pondering why it is that I can't puff and pass when it's my turn,
Laundering? No I'm just tryna walk out my crib and be able to return,
Simple times don't come to easy so I take nothing for granted,
Proud to be me cuz my outlook on life just happens to be slanted,
Living the life of the middle class when clearly that ain't the case,
Speaking to me ain't like Tyrone, known only to be black in the face,
The witest black guy you know, Oreo seems to be my denomination,
Is it my fault that I say Fuck the NBA, it's the X-Games I'm chasin,
Sorry though cuz busting gats, and chillin n the corner, it's my passion,
Easily I'd rather meet my soulmate instead of out constantly smashin,
Watchin my back for temptation, stumbling around for escape from my hell,
Taking the hard road cuz the easy answer is giving in and re-combining with cells,
I guess you could say that my sin to the world is not fittin the description,
Breaking outta the system, hoping to prove that stereotypes on me are fiction...

Sin'cere
As I remember what I saw when I was sitting in those steps
I recaptured the visions in my mind as I shivered on that death
Didn’t kno what to do bloody tears came down my cheeks as his
Did too........... didn’t have a clue but I wish I knew who did this
So I shivered there….clueless on what to do in my rocking chair
Cant sleep, or dream the nightmares take over me like an exorcist scare
The sleepless nights kills me inside it just keeps going on and on and builds
So scared on what to say or what I should do, scratches on my neck like gills
And the fact just attacked me in my face and hands that I killed my brother
In revenge that I killed myself when he also just did the same to my mother

Ysdat
From the womb to the tomb,My crimes moon is in bloom
Thru the misfit to the wrist's slit,Im'a murderous kids hit
like the crack pipe to the wack nights,I failed to act right
when the time came I played mind games,failed to find aims
In the lifes race,hesitated in night rapes,I silenced guys hates
while the finest eyes drapped on your heinest highest place
watch the guy who minds fate try control his eye rate
Lifes the finest timed place while my crime is high laced
If the tomb is my place then evils death is my trace
leave the breath as my face and then confess in guys space
link the rest to times date of the agressive crimes placed


http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198517

1-Real nice flow...nice vocab, dope.
2-everything i have ever read from you is nice, and this is still hotness.
3-Real nice, but i dont like all of the commas in your verse.
4-long lines but flow ight, good vocab still, nice verse.
5-Pure Hotness..just dope, vocab was really hot.
Overall, just dope...


PLZ RTF in my sig..

Was Aight nothing special but decent drop...pz

Uppin this bizzitch...and I know I use long lines...in audio I rap fast so I get more woerds in...I hate that comment now lol

1 bonecollector your flows gotten alot better from your other open mics from what ive seen nothign special lyrically you probably had the most generic verse but not bad
2 paranoid good flow and vocab yours was the most out of the box you had imagery i liked it my favorite verse props
3 cezar ok verse your first bar looks familiar?????? overall not very creative you had a few good lines but most of it was blah good flow though
4 lfs yoru verse was pretty creatvie you had good flow and good vocab props
5 sin cere i liked your verse yours was oen of the more creative ones props there were a few good lines i was feeling in there props ive never read any of your peices
6ysd@ you are on everything lol your verse was l;acking i thought lol ive seen far better from you yo u didnt come very creative at all oh well every 1 has duds sometiem

OVERALL- everyone had good flow vocab was inconsistent in soem verse btu not bad creativity you could have done better paranoid was the only one who came really creative and sin cere had a few creative lines but on the overall topic i think you guys could have been more creative i think yuou would have gotten more feed on a different topic since cs jsut did an open mic on sins structure was good in everyones verse overall decent drop

oh and can you return feed on se7en please

boo willa. my verse= woot woot with mutlis.

YSdat was pretty good...
bonecollectors was boring
paranoid was okay.. but there was one line that i didnt like
cezar.. ummm... nice.. but u can do better
LFS had the best out of them all but still asnt as good as i expected
sincer..alright

wow havent seen paramik a quite a while...

Godamn people keep changing name..
who fuck u is?

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Uppin this once more...Thanks for all the positive feed on my verse. I appreciate it mates lol.

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Bump this once again..........

this jawn was good. everybody had some nice creative verses.
bonecollectors verse was decent. i'd give it a 7.5-8
Paranoids verse was pretty good vocab i'd give it an 8
ceasars joint was nice, i like the line about the tracks alot id' give yours a 9
sincere had a nice flow and alof of good imagery but thats it i give it an 8
ysdat had a good flow and some hot multies but it didnt make too much sense in some places. but i'd give it a 8.5-9 cuz everthing else was straight
yall ha d a nice drop here. return the favor....1.....