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(Everlasting Pain).....SHODOWN ft/ AX DOGG
AX DOGG= BLUE
SHODOWN=RED When I was young I never though in Grown Up's life with a nine under my pillow and depending on a rifle I wake up, put on my chain and its always pain whateva I do is the same to the game I'm playin my cornrows hurt so bad, I fucked up the dreams I had My girl is always mad, I lost half of my squad Growin up in the streets, hustlin everyday workin my ass off.....lifes pain just to get paid i look in the mirror every morning to a villian dressed black on black...Criminal feelin... walkin the streets on my own..only my shadow follows and guides me.......my feelings get shallow gunshots errday, my cuzin's on jail for poaching and my niggaz need me as a coach, I feel like a roach bout ta get squashed, I can't be lighthearted My life runs like an arpeggio, like if it was farted the hood's always on war, my nigga stole m car My life is keeped in a jar, all this became a mental scar Drenched..........all soaked in blood and pain look up to the sky yet pain keeps fallin like rain keeps pourin and pourin, wont stop its hauntin flourishin me tired..........i sit in the dar yawning wit the shotgun in hand...........magnum in the other to my left my moms yellin.....to the right is my brother Ax Dogg walks the dog in the morning fog when I less expect it, I get stomped like a bug can't get the rats of the rug, The Pain revolution I ain't gettin killed, I come from a soulja institution feeling so down nothing i can do....... lookin at my family......it turns me black and blue there was nuthin in my mind...except for my pain feelin it every single day....driving me insane..... lying on the bed all soaked in blood.......its just begun all thats left of me is a dead body...in hand is the shotgun! |
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nice verses showdown.....
and I like the way you arranged my verse lol... good track |
...........uppin................
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uppin this man WERD!!!
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i really couldnt get into this, sorry man... flow seemed on but as i cant hear it you cant really comment on flow... content was meh and kinda played out aswell, not bad for what it was i guess
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Bump Bump :bump Bump
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the topic was definitely played. vocab was horrible. structure worked so when i tried rapping it, it flowed.
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vocab horrible??
hmmmm *cries* haha |
hahahah man werd yo bumbin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!this shit
uppin!!! |
Its two Links not one
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This was meh to me. Vocab was meh. Content was meh. Flow was cool. But it was meh. I know Ax and this was no where near his best. I don't know shodown but a llittle lelvtion in vocab could help. And uhh...yea it was meh. 6.5/10http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208371 . Don't hate vote.
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lol................ thnx
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