a couple bars
 

just woke up and it came to me so im droppin it

when i get to rapin its just theese crazy things happen
i hear the clips snapin and then here comes the bass crackin
my flows never wack infact i keeps it intack
and when i. battle you i gotta cut you some slack
and cause i rhyme i make dollas because it makes sence
but cause your wack you fucked stuck behind makin cents
your bars are sowrong they should've never been made
thats why im shine'in and yo ass chilln in the shade

\hit me up on it

ye, it was iight things to work on:

Your vocab needs to be upped, enhance ya verse and make it more complexed.
Your structure-TRY keeping each line closer at the end matching up...making it flow better
Multis-Your multis was iight, but nothing special...you need to complex it up and make it less childish

even though it was a key style. you still gutta keep on topic, you went from rapin to someone to battelin the reader to maken money to hidding in the shade lol....get wut i mean?

yes.....keep elevatin

i got ya mang thatsks for the help

Hey thats pretty phat....... I give it 8/10

it was good, pretty good flow this is one of ur childish drops