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Robitussin..
It can fuck you up like twelve shots of vodka
Just one measly bottle down your stomach And you're off to a night of fun colors and hallucinations. I saw an angel in my mind, and she gave me a hug And then I saw a rainbow on my wall, I feel like a slug. Walking across the room, how did I end up on the ground? I close my eyes and I swear I'm spinning around. Talk an hour on the phone, hang up, And not know what the hell I just said. I think I told her to tell my mom I want to be dead. I put on a movie and I think I'm actually in it, And then play some music and every song is euphoric. I don't want to sleep because I'm afraid I'll forget to breathe I guess you could argue that I am a teenager in need. lmao..idk..i'll have links up soon.... |
interesting, to say the least... lol.
Awesome multies, structure and flow. Really though, idk either. |
Drop two links or this will be closed
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Word, thanks for the feed.......
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Diden't really understand to much but nice drop i guess....it's intresting
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This wuz all right.The whole concept isn't all that original.Cuz while the robitussin shit hasn't been done before...it's the same as drugs.I think the content wuz good.As for your rhyming...it wuz ite....except for the hang up/phone line..it wuz there..but didn't rhyme.But overall..decent peice.
RTF on the Open Mic I got in my sig. :thumbup: |
Hmm i think this is way to short for a open mic, open mics should be a story, not gay random shit. im not sayin ya shits wack but you need to give ya shit more creativty at least if your not gonna use any eternal multiples use some metaphors in there to give it that depth. ya know. your vocab was decent and sometimes i thought some shit was forced.
anyway keep elevatin man, 1 can ya rtf on the shit in my sig, or just look around in the forum for my collabs n what not. |
ight thanks for that feed..
this really wasnt my greatest..i actually wrote it while on Robi...lol...but yea...drugs are fucked....i will return feed soon enough... uppin for me... |
good drop was interesting overall i think 8/10 i think
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