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Sin`cere vs chip
Battle Rules:
Optional Topics 20-40 lines 3 day Check & Drop 3-0 KO 4-1 kO 6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting :love: Good Luck. :love: Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 09-25-05 at 07:08 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. Closed - Expired battle win |
unofficial check-in......... thinkin up a topic........ i'll post my piece tomorrow........
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whats the topic...or is jus 2 diff. topics for both competitors....????
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well as u kno tha topic is
love checkin and then i will....aight.... |
chip has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-24-05 12:44 AM.
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Sin`cere has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-24-05 12:45 AM.
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This Thing Like Love
what u do to me, the way your being caresses my soul, apart of me, two halves of the same whole object, i tried to be objective goin into this, checked all of your references, your old man wasn't enough to fullfil your needs, if love iz a test, u gon get a A-paper and i promise to never cheat,ever, love ain't a word i use often, so u know i'm legit, your hair beautiful, your eyes beautiful, your soul iz pure, my gifts are perfect, bcuz you're worth it, you so fine i'm glad you're mine, but would never treat u like property, for u i'll do anything, i'll be more than i was, and i'll change what i will be, i see the future, and in the end i want it to be, just exactly how i have forseen, u with me in this extordinary thing that can't be captured by the words in a verse, that has no structure or flow other than it's own, it's more than that word, cuz i love u more than that, grace is amazing, me and u are the perfect balance, cuz i'm me and you're full of talent, girl i love u and i'll put down myself to prove it, if need be, fuck this battle, i'll lose it or forfit, what ever u see fit, cuz we much more than that he say,she say, much more than anything mortal, we can never be stopped, we're make music, u R&B i'm Hip-Hop, i can tell u an angel, how could u get with me, u came down and blessed my life with u, i thank the Lord for raining this perpetual blessing from above, and for this thing we have, this thing like love. |
I couldn’t believe what they told me were facts My heart started bumping and it started to attack My whole body shivering, shaking couldn’t believe Began to easily breathe and conceive that I leave Into a cold deepness hole of sorrow I swallowed The truth that was hollow so much I couldn’t follow Till tomorrow I found myself crying on to everyday Couldn’t eat anything, stomach empty I never weigh Anything, The fondness flowed through my mind And in time I tried to rewind and see if I was blind Or if I did anything wrong to fix the actions in voice Acting like a lil boy..........I picked the wrong choice So again im back to reality, but in mentality I suffered That my heart starting to bump................for another I got over her and found a new love inside my valentine Love that was real, groupies is what I feel inside their mind Got over my gurl who dumped me and found a new hug The hug of the crowds, when they scream loud, Hip Hop’s Love |
Voted For: Sin`cere
you got this,emotion is solid. structure helped flow, use of vocab really made your peice shine above you oponent's. both dropped some what weak but meh,good battle Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: Sin`cere
v/sin'cere sin'cere-your verse was pretty dope man, short but sweet...you had good flow...good structure...i feel your vocab was hott and intact...your topic was hard to keep track of...didnt really know what u were trying to do...but i feel you kept emotion tight..and everything in control. overall 8/10 chip-Your verse was hard to follow, first off ur verse was poorly structured...couldnt flow well at all..ur vocab wasnt much special but nothing to knock you on...i dont knwo if this was poetry or wut..but u had god emotion...and iight imagery..but nothing special.......u need to elevate a bit...but overall 6/10 v/sin'cere rtf on one of my battles in 48 hours or this vote WILL be disqualified |
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