How To.....
 

how to stop a nine from hittin
or to keep a dime from strippin
how to stop a liar from snitchin
or to keep a "wire" from listenin

learn how to define a written
niggas coincide with da livin
so many people barely gettin
to experience their beginning

[now they gone....]

smoking trees forgetting about disease, cock and spray gats with ease
mothers shudder u hear da screams, its not a "game" or in ya "dreams"
whos a friend today? everybody skeems, to achieve their necessaties
to keep breathings my necessaty, while othas suffer 4 success & greed
yes jesus is alive but satan's in me, i could feed myself excessive weed
till' these lungs start stressin me, to da point where i need a vasectomy
....but not to sterilize da kids in me, be4 graduating with a legit degree
i might be laid down, blood-less wit no sound, escapin da chest in me
but i pray 4 God not 2 take da breaths in me, pain he'll see eventually
oh and did i mention he, can save lives but wont jus cuz ur innocently
pursuing a good life indeed, i tried to stop hustling but its grams i need
to help feed my family, my family...wont wanna see me lying helplessly
on the ground surrounded by red i bleed, through da arms legs & feet
unconscious so only death can retrieve, me from this hell on earth i see
everyday kids die from wounds 2 deep, docs cant find cures 2 relieve
shit i got tricks up my sleeve, ask a magician he probably heard of me

[now i'm strong....]

enough to weave, from left to right
..dodgin da need, to spliff and light
blunts or hustle to buy gifts for wifes
dat might not be true, or living trife

follow me if u think i'm nice, u might be right
or if i'm not good enough, u probably like...
"he 'hit' good points but he can hardly 'fight' "!

[now u'll listen....]

how to stop a nine from hittin
or to keep a dime from strippin
how to stop a liar from snitchin
or to keep a "wire" from listenin

learn how to define a written
niggas coincide with da livin
so many people barely gettin
to experience their beginning




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^not bad man...i liked it...i find that the structure was dope...had good flow..but ur hooks were kinda annoying..cuz they were so short lined...no prob though....u had good flow through out ur whole verse vocab was iight...coulda been better..concept was good....multis....meh coulda been better...overall 7.5/10..man im fealin this fo real

rtf on one of my battles please i need votes :thumbup:

oh yea...u need 2 links..............for and o/m now

no problem and thanks for tellin me about tha "2 links" rule, i aint know we needed two but if i got enough posts i'll vote up jus keep checkin out my OMs

up this

muthafucka that's incredible!

lol thank u for that shit kid, i appreciate tha luv forreal

Yo shits phat man keep it up homes

chea good lookin out, preciate tha feed niggas UPPIN

chea lemme up this shit, scream at it niggas whats good

Damn havent seen ya in a min. Whats up cuz.....Anyways nice to cya back and This was nice drop. I was feeling the concept and i think the chorus could of been wordered better. But anyways everything was on poin and you should try to spit on audio to really get that emotion threw nah mean. Anyways everything was straight on this except the chorus. I give ya 8. Keep it real and do you and stay up fam.

yo that shit was hot fam
good use of multies
aint really feelin the hooks, but thats just me famm
overall, i really like this drop

8/10 all love no hate
peace

not good it didn't rhyme nowhere the level of rhymes i hear today other cats gonna say hey man this is good but not you could've said

could've said // smoke trees coke and weed when i squeeze a pipe,

but yo keep up the good works for real nice imagetry