quick six lines tell me wut yall think
 

im just a skinny nigga tryna get bigger grow stronger in a rush rushin cant wait no longer

sick a seein moms comin home from work her back hurtin
cryin on my shoulder cuz her jobs fuckin her over

on time evry day but gotta bark to get her pay
hes racist she says and assultin in sum way

go to see him on his off day and let 'em know
you fuckin wit moms no more and draw the 44

as the headlines read boy laughs hard as his moms boss bleeds probably get the chair good reason right there

I tell the judge my excusesfor the crimes i commited
I wuz high when i did it

First of all, you ignorant fool. That looks like a lot more than 6 lines to me.

1st Bar - no point to it. it sucks. seriously. you need to elevate.
2nd Bar - would be better if you took out the cuss word. better than your first cause there was an actual complete thought in this one.
3rd Bar - umm the second line was kinda confusing. didnt quite get it.
4th Bar - okay so i finally see where this whole thing is going. but again the second line was lame and i didnt understand it.
5th Bar - ok so what does the chair have to do with anything?
6th Bar - ha ha. probly the best thing.



So you really need to elevate. Learn some new words. Learn to make complete thoughts in your lines and write them in a way that everyone will be able to understand. Good luck.

garbage..........werd............

in the military... we call that shyt right there... "A no-go at this station!".... get at the back of da line and try that shyt again holmes...werdage!

*musta bumped his head or sumn typin' some shyt like that over da internet... needs to get his e-pass snatched*