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about to explode
This rage won't seem to disapear when im on stage I feel so lost inside going to work with a lousy wage im getting more mad by the days sick of my muth'as ways with nothing to do in dis empty house but just sit n gaze it's like my lifes been erazed the outsider dat never fit in My mother don't even care so i got half my soul missin livin in here is like prison losing all my reality and vision and this pain won't go away so imagine urself in my position Death is what im wishin im'a an alien put on this earth 2 serve a hell sentence and still serving it since birth Nobody seems to care anymore just left on the floor neglected in the past and don't know what i gotta live for all this shit's gotta stop cuz im like a a volcano waiting to erupt everythings fucked nothings right and it all sucks how would you feel if ya family treated you like a nobody You mutha fuckers think u won but you simply cannot stop me you wanna judge me but i won't give in till one of u pops me! HATE ME Not care for me and carry on being cocky! |
I give you props son, nice drop.
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thanks..............
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Drop two link to two OM's you have left decent feedback on or this will be closed
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Your vocabulary was basic, structure was okay, flow was okay, concept was nothing special. Nobody doesn't rhyme with stop me, or maybe it was just 'nobody' and 'me' meant to be rhyming, in which case that was stupid. Better then what maddrapper does, not better then 40% of RV. 7/10
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Hey not bad man, I liked it
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damn... u got "technique" lol
but still u gotta elvate ur vocab 9/10 |
^ No, not 9/10, this was a shitty OM.
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it was ight duke u gotten a lil betta but keep writin & u'll reach ya potential but i'll give diz a 6/10 ....mainly cuz tha vocab was betta diz time den ur last piece, structure was good, imagery & topic u wrote about jus seemed off a lil ...but not bad
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YEAH THIS WAS NICE i FELT THIS i PICTURED YOU TRAPPED IN STREET WITH NO ANSWERS COULD'VE RHYMED IT MORE BUT STILL A GOOD DROP 6/10 KEEP UP THE GOOD WORKS HOMEY
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