I'm Back Mu Fuckas..."Oh So Lovely"
 

www.soundclick.com/limitededitioncan

Yeah...this song is completely me...beat and everything...

Links:

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2469645
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2469660

listening now

beat - starting off now. im likin this one beat. the bad thing about this is the fact that its repetitive. it really doesnt change at all. i like the bass line. the drums match it well.

flow - kinda boring flow because its the same basically throughout the whole song. but you did stay on point riding the beat well.

lyrics - lyrically this was an okay drop. the chorus kinda sucked in my opinion. it was just a lil too boring. reminded me of Eminem talkin about ya mom and everything.

mic prescence - good. the emotion put into this song was good. voice sounds somewhat original.




this was an okay drop overall. nothing too spectacular or anything. feel free to return the favor and leave feed on my song "Persevere"

Thanks...uppin on this slept shit...

Strate topic, nice flow and delivery, i'm feelin da hook... overall decent track....

pz

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IIte havent heard one of youre beats, but im feelin the strings in this one, iite you come in, quality good, maybe turn down the vocals and beat a lil...like the beat down like 4.5 and vocals by 2.5...but lyrics are def good, very good shit from you, happy you back in this...hook is my favourite in this, maybe add another layer to the hook to get that deliviery, but this is a good track, verse 2....lyrics are crazy, shit real deep, reminicent of eminem, keep it up....9/10...

Thanks...uppin' this for some more feed...

nice beat man, u elevated alot on that, nice flow man and nice lyrics and all, nice quality, chorus is dope

*downloads the mp3*


yea i like this song...
last time i heard u u was wack.....but ur dope man...

beat kinda jerky at the start...lyrics are felt though

beat kinda has a drone quality to it...not feelin it

and the levels seem loud as hell through my headphones


gotta respect ur emotion here though

not bad


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Thanks all...uppin once again...

Beat is cool...

Flow- u did ya thang but try to switch up flows sometimes because if u go "na Na Na" all the time..it holds your delivery back...and doesnt keep the listeners enterained....emotions well....am feelin it....overall nice come back track..

A'ight thanks...

Uppin' once again...

Upp..............

I like the beat, there's so much you can do with it even tho it's real simple...

Verse-
I'm feeling the fact that you got out that range of basic lyrics, you added some multis (towards the end of the 1st verse)...

the Chorus, i actually am feeling.. your delivery is nice for hooks, i'm feeling your emotion mos definately.

Verse-
Your flow is pretty repetitive, like it sound like you keep the exact same pattern the whole entire time, so that's a bad thing... i like the concept of the song, kinda like "a song of strength".. You just have to switch up your flow some, be a little more risky with your lyrics..

Don't do this the entire time..
Blah blah blah blah bam
blah blah blah blah dam
^^instead of this simple scheme

Try:
blada blada bam
blah blah blah blah dam

^^If you do that, make sure you mix it up.. but experiment on trying different flows, you can keep the one you have but spice it up.. make it unpredictable. :thumbup:
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beat's okay. Not nuts about the synths, but it has a nice build-up. The beat needs a more pronounced melody.

the quality is shakey. got mad sizzle on it, but the lyrics on it were hot IMO and the flow was better than average, but but more lumpy than "great". Pretty much "really good". If the flow on the hook was on and you doubled it, it'd actually be pretty hot man. Shoulda cut that extra syl of "the" when saiyng "I bring the melody". I'd have changed it to "I bring melodies..."

Beat works well with it man. All in all it's a pretty good track that needs a little polish to be a "Great" track. 1