Peep-WILL RTF (words about words)
 

Title: Words about words

any constructive criticism is welcome and i will RTF if u ask me to.



Injecting this page with my pen,
The ink-an antidote to the poison of pain.
I sober my sorrows with words. So intoxicating.
Diction is my addiction.
The wonderful thing about words? Well,
I can Tell tales as I Trail my pen,
Spilt tears, mixed with ink,
create cocktails of broken dreams;
or stories of purest love.
Language can be a barrier.
But when written breaks boundaries and builds bonds.
writing captures moments,so that one moment lives on.
But the worst thing about words?
theres not enough words in the whole wide world,
to express the emotional extremes each of us experience.
Whether its deep joy, documented dreams or depression.
Action! Not writing may be the best form of expression.


I'll get links now....

The Last Line Is a Qoute Of Remeberance I Shall Say I Think That You Should Rock That Last Line In Your Sig Somwhere ASAP b4 I do lol

I Liek This peice Although The lines were SHort I Like it

Can You please RTF on my Poetry Peice Its The Second OM in my Sig Named Fuel For The Fire

lol thank u! and if u wanna rock it, make sure u put my name in there sumwhere! ;)

i'll check ur piece out now.

hey good piece fo sho.......

Spilt tears, mixed with ink,
create a cocktail of broken dreams;
or stories of purest love.
Language can be a barrier.
^^^^fav lines

u got some mad talent aint neva seen none of ur shit on here b4 but i sure would like to c some more of it...........1

wow, thanx a lot, and i will RTF wen u want me to.

BTW anyone else droppin feed, plz tell me how to improve it, i wana make it better. Thanx to u guys tho! :D

Uppin To The Top...............

i think itz a good piece mayne,i really like it,like satan spawn said tha lines are a lil short but this was still real hot...you already left feed on mine so i cant ask for anything except 1 thing,and that is that you keep at this cuz your nice at what you do mayne...keep it up...holla!

thanx! thng is i need to make sure the punctuation reflects the msg, theres a poetry comp happening soon and im practicising cuz i wanna enter it. so yeah, thanx man p.s. im a girl and u stole my original name1 lol

can you just go to open mic again and check out tha other 1 i just wrote,its called A Tragic Tale...please leave feed and ill rtf again on anything anytime...thanx alot and please keep at it...hit me bak,nice job...oh and P.S. sorry for tha whole name thing...my bad...anyway,please hit up my open mic

i liked the topic - talking bout words / ink / pen
always a good read.. some of you lines were pretty good
while others were weak and boring. very unconsistant
with a little work tho this could be a very good poem
try using words that have a much deeper emotional meaning
when your writing dont use the first word that comes to your head
think about it and youll think of a better word or phrase to
express what your trying to say - keep writin man, ill check up on ya next drop

could u tell me which were which cuz i really wanna improve...

wow.... this iz beautiful...... sorta flowed like spoken word....... i'm not sure i could give u any help with elevation on this piece..... good voc. and metas were nice..... u are quickly becoming my favorite poet (after Tweety, i'm her #1 fan)...... 10/10 overall for this great piece............

wow!! for real!? lol im shocked :shocked: thanx a lot man, i'll rtf on watever u need...