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Fuel For The Fire - Dedication
This Piece I Wrote for The Poetry League But I Also Wrote It In Dedication to The People Down In New Orleans
..:: Fuel To The Fire ::.. The Judgemental Overseers Who Kill More Than Michael Myers Taking Away All Our Belongings Even The Wheels With No Tire The Beatings Of The Underdog For No Reason But A Sick Desire -That's Fuel For The Fire The Setbacks, The Defeats, The Discouragement Spoken By Others The Brutal Killings Of Fathers , Sisters, Borthers, And Mothers All Beacuse You Feel The We Are Not Equal To Even Have a Attire -That's Fuel For The Fire Taking Away Our Names And Givin Us The Choice Of Death Or Chains Trying To Convince Us That We Are Not The Same Even Down To The Intellegnce That Is In Our Brain -That's Fuel for The Fire But The Sickness That Is Now In Their Area Because Of Bad Water And The Deaths Of Their Family Because Of No Supporter Tryin To Really Help Them Out By The Words That I Speak -Motivation Is The Fuel For The Fire |
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The Piece That I Left feedback On Now lets Uppin This Damn Tang |
emotion is dominant in this piece, it has a decent flow, altho i think u tried too hard to make it rhyme. i think with an emotive piece like this, the rhyming was actually unnecessary.
Taking Away Our Names And Givin Us The Choice Of Death Or Chains Trying To Convince Us That We Are Not The Same Even Down To The Intellegnce That Is In Our Brain -That's Fuel for The Fire ^^^that was the best lines by far. I really liked the statement and it seemed as though u were angry,again emotion. keep elevating and keep droppin! 1 |
good piece overall....A LOT of emotion in dis piece but didnt flow too well in my eyez maybe cause u tried too hard but oh well
But The Sickness That Is Now In Their Area Because Of Bad Water And The Deaths Of Their Family Because Of No Supporter Tryin To Really Help Them Out By The Words That I Speak -Motivation Is The Fuel For The Fire ^^those were da best lines in my eyez keep up da good work..1 |
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