Dead Beat Dad (My First Post Young)
 

YO DIZ IZ VERY DEEP FOR ME NIGGA! DIZ SHIT RIGHT HERE IS NICE THOUGH MY NIGGA CHECK IT OUT THE NEW RULER OF RAPVERSE! HOLLLLLAAAA!!!!!J~R

CHEA CHEA YO
verse1
i dont have no father he dead to me
fuk all dat i love you son shit and evrthyng else you said to me
you didnt raise me nigga my moms did
you helped bring to diz world but that aint shit
my moms made me a man i guezz yo moms made you a bitch
cause you cant even take responsibility for ur own kid
hittin my momz waz like hittin me bitch
you lucky cus i waz young and i couldnt do shit
my momz waz a ryda cause she took dat for 23 years
what did you eva do besides hit her and drink beer
i fuken hate u wit a passion
and whats sad is i wont be happy till u layen in a casket
thats how i truly feel to tell you da truth
and thats why get shit off my chest in da booth
nigga if I eva see u again i dont know wat i would do
shoot you stab you i'D open shop on you dude

(hook)
yo i aint got no father(fuk him shit)
i neva had no father(cause he a bitch)
and i dont want no father(fuckin snitch)
and i dont need no father(he can suck my dick) :thefinger

verse2
aint thAT sum shit 17 yrs witout a father
it was jus me my 2 sistas and my motha
he tried to apologize for the mistakes he did
sayin he just human nigga fuk dat bitch
he wasnt their when i needed him the most
when he gone that'll be the day my fam will toast
i aint got luv for you cause u bounced out on me
now tryin to come back and beg for an apology
get tha fuk out of here you aint my homie
the nigga actin like bitch now cause he all lonely
if u get hit wit a car or get shot wit the nine
thatll be fine u think give a fuck well u outta of ya mind
dont try to get close to me nigga jus stay in ya place
you aint got the right to call me ya son if u did i'd spit in ya face
i've been wit my mom for 17 years and you've benn married for 23
YOU AINT BEEN WIT HER LONGER THAN ME THATS SAD !B!

(hook)
yo i aint got no father(fuk him shit)
i neva had no father(cause he a bitch)
and i dont want no father(fuckin snitch)
and i dont need no father(he can suck my dick) :thefinger

verse3
you aint my pops and i aint got yo bak
how goin tell me to behave when you dont know how to act
you dont even respect women as a matter fact
how you call ya self a man you should be laid on ya back
and all of a sudden you care for ya kids
fuk that i hope u burn in hell 4 diz shit
you wasnt there for me when i was 14 and got jumped
you wasnt there 2 stop me from smokin a blunt
you wasnt there to tell me not to get drunk
and you wasnt there for me when life had me on stuck
and you wasnt there for me po pos tried to lock me up
and you damn sure wasnt there when niggas tried to pop me up
be your friend fuk dat yo
the niggas that i roll wit now would kiled you ho,and sent ya body baCk 2 mexico
i got problem solver and its called a revolver :shoot:
im tell you to walk away bitch cause you aint my father :gfy:

(hook)
yo i aint got no father(fuk him shit)
i neva had no father(cause he a bitch) :banghead:
and i dont want no father(fuckin snitch)
and i dont need no father(he can suck my dick) :thefinger

upPIN dIZ mAN iM THA sHiT

Hmm..
This wuz ok too.Direct and str8 to the point.And I like that.Cuz a lotta niggas on this site like to post complex,wannabe shakespeare shit that give you a headache.
the content wuz cool..
Only thing you could prolly up is ur rhyming...maybe git some multis or add internals to fix a couple of little glitches in the flow.

And like I said before in the other thread...this one would sound good on audio.
It really needs that anger and shit..ya feel me?

So yea...keep at it..ya got a good style at this shit....

^^Werd to that...But up your vocab too,and your rhyming...keep at it...Holla at me...1

thanks much love