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Molded creatures Covered by crimson blossoms Perfectly pure Melting together as one One motion, one passion Pouring out all we have From the depths of our being United at last In this wild jungle Of temptation Where lust soars And faith fades We found each other In our purest form Vulnerable Yet oh so beautiful In the midst of darkness We brought fire In the midst of blistering cold We brought heat In the midst of hatred He brought love Bring me more Links: Dead Weight by ~Eire~ Stressful days by ~lextownkillaz~ |
that was a good drop the vocab could have been better but over all i like it good drop
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actually a nice freeverse piece,the emotion was beautiful drama q,the imagery i felt was powerful i mean it's a imagery so quiet but also strong because it expresses alot beautifully,the vocab was average i was really fond of this piece...
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What up DQ aint been around in awhile finaly dropin pieces again :-D
I really liked this piece DQ... Could relate to it... dunno if it was something you wrote from yourself or not but it was really good... imagery was there but it wasnt... barely felt but yet strong... i enojoyed your freeverse.. this was beautifully written... your vocab could have been uppedbut in this piece its not really needed everything works for itself... Really nice piece here babe... |
i really liked this.. it was so simple yet so in depth
i cant really describe what i liked about it.. it just seemed like everything you said was so personal and rich with emotion, wich makes for much better poetry.. props |
Thank you for the feedback everyone...
Sad to say I wrote this for my boyfriend and before I got the chance to show it to him...he dumped me... Oh well, it's all good |
aww you poor baby :( lol
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Oh well
His loss ;) |
i wish youd write me a poem *wink wink* :)
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Haha
Consider it done! |
gotta love this girl ;)
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:Ogood piece right here.........imagery was awesome......vocab coulda been worked on but it was cool othawise....uhm u know all da otha shit.....good piece DQ...keep up da good work...n we gotta do a collab sometime
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Yeh hit me up bout a collab ma
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Nice piece DQ.
I was liking the imagery in the piece, overall it was nice. The vocabs you used weren't overly complex, but I think that added to your piece in a way. A lot of people cram complexity into their drops to enforce their emotion and imagery, you came quite simple and yet your imagery and emotion were kept strong. 7/10. |
DQ, amazing poem, simplistic, yet thhough provoking..simply great...imagery in all...i just joined the site..and y'all im stuggling as to how i can post poems..start battles...both voiceand writen...any help!
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