Beyond Deaths Horizon (Complex Vocab)
 

Beyond Deaths Horizon

Derived from the basis, look'd upon, from the eyes of replacements
Forms the ties of lies.........arise.......from the lives of abasements*
Obligated and anxious, I strive...................for high approbations*
This feel'n of Apprehension*....................aspire's my assignation*
I bow to his graces.........................and vow in loud supplication*
Sanguine*, he'll atone me........................from past pertubation*
First and last of creations......pearly gates.......the last of locations
Died and now face to face.....................what a massive occassion
But soon an emotion correction................from un-spoken deception
He speaks.."I know you've sin'd, but before i ask im open to questions"
I spoke with respect.........look'd up........words thrown in direction
I started small......................."Is this where souls are collected?"
He froze in objection....stated..."I made you, your known for deflections"
"Fear not thee..........cuz in the end..........im your only projection"
I took note of the messege.....thoughts gleaned*....i've chosen his methods
Asked "Can I see my life, viewed from eyes, and closed to discrections?"
My hope's again lessened....................I was tested with the cause
Did my best for the cause....................but was left with a pause
"Too much stress for me God".............."Neva messed with the laws"
"If my gifts a curse.....then why should i be blessed with these flaws?"
Garrulous*, but still i was imperturbable* he said "No reason to grieve"
"Cuz in your times of need..............came and kept faith inside me"
So its not when it seems............................when i start realize'n
It's just you, him, and words......................behind deaths horizon


don't mind the * thas pretty much the vocab im talk'n about...........lol

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212799
Mirrored World by drama queen (good piece check it out)

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212867
The Jigsaw Marage by Mentalz

my links

Damn homie thats wassup i was really feeling this , you had excellent wordplay and vocab usuage , nice structure , but you could have taken the.......dots out but it was cool..You had nice feeling and emotions going toward this peice , and it really showed ...Overall keep it up homie , nice job

ehh............fo real fo rea..........iono y i keep put'em there.......i'll do it
and just.........keep do'n it..........lmao like that.........

ups for feed

ups fo feed.............

What's so complex? Get a rhyming dictionary, if you really want to have a complex vocabulary you have to have it there not just to rhyme.

its complex because the words with the * have more then 1 meaning and is used once with 2 or more meanings thas how................jerk............lol

so look up those words and you'll see what im talk'n about

Wow this was hot. Liking the vocab, i didnt really need to look it up - i understood the piece enough to realise what you meant by them.

The rhyme scheme was dope, i wasnt too sure about:

I spoke with respect.........look'd up........words thrown in direction
I started small......................."Is this where souls are collected?"

I didnt really catch a rhyme from that, it threw me off and i had to start from the next 2 lines.

Good topic, i havent really been around this site enough to know if its been used but im sure you did it justice whether it has or hasnt.

Good work, ill keep an eye for more of your work to come.

Leave feed on my link... Thanks.
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=213471

The word...'sit' has more then one meaning. It looks like your vocab is there to rhyme, not to just be there.

hmmmm..............maybe...................but then again maybe not lol