Cdusit vs Street Scripture
 

Battle Rules:

6-15 lines

No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 11-13-05 at 04:04 PM

Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in.

Street Scripture has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-13-05 03:37 PM.

Cdusit has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-13-05 03:42 PM.

kids facing a lost cause like the never ending story..theres no end in sight
he a confused protester..I told him not to bite he yelled " I defend my right"
Id say somthing funny, he replies with "but"......reinforcing his position**
asked him to battle......fag needed an hour to make a decision
I havent written generic wack punches for a fucking while
mainly because i dont want to bite Street Scripture's style
moments have past so i was going to use this line as a filler
but kids getting rapped in this battle...and im not refering to the star of thriller****
I guess i shouldnt be so hard and end this on a freindly note
but Street Scripture reminds me of broke resturant customers....
........cant pay so he pretend he choked!!!!

* never ending storys a movie
**say somthing funny is a joke.. "but" of the joke..
***thriller micheal jackson movie

Check it, he crossin my territory so now I gotta rip this nigga into shreds
The tip of my pencil killin him lyrically, like I'm usin some gun lead
He ain't ready for me, his raps to pre-mature it's in the stages of wettin the bed
My shit notorious like B.I.G., he tryin to catch up like a bunch of feds
He's just another white boy, an mc wannabe who tryin to be like the stars
But it's takin him 15 minutes just to think up one whole bar
Cus my punches crossin over like ghosts doin 187 like they inside of a car

I think you won this personally, cus I don't do freestyles and 15 minutes ain't enough for me to elevate.

good drop.

lets get some votes in here I RTF on everything.

Good shit there too, mines was crap though don't jack off round the bush.......uppin.......

Voted For: Cdusit

Ok leme do my breakdown..

S.S.- You seemed like you were just using irrelevant similies.
Like the "you're trying to catch up like a bunch of fed". Now I'm looking at this and you sort of have a style like nas. But it doesnt work in the battle area. And your closer wasn't all that hot either. You're getting there, just fix the flow and work your punches a bit better.

Cdusit.
aight now I saw alot of personals in here. Flow was streched.
The opener was somewhat funny, but my favorite lines were:

I havent written generic wack punches for a fucking while
mainly because i dont want to bite Street Scripture's style

and

Id say somthing funny, he replies with "but"......reinforcing his position**
asked him to battle......fag needed an hour to make a decision

The flow was still streched, but eh its text. Over all you had more hard hitting punches so you win.

V/C buscuit. :)

Voted For: Cdusit

This was a pretty one-sided battle Cdusit took this.

Street Scripture:
Check it, he crossin my territory so now I gotta rip this nigga into shreds
The tip of my pencil killin him lyrically, like I'm usin some gun lead
Naw, weak opener
He ain't ready for me, his raps to pre-mature it's in the stages of wettin the bed
My shit notorious like B.I.G., he tryin to catch up like a bunch of feds
Nope..Weak
He's just another white boy, an mc wannabe who tryin to be like the stars
But it's takin him 15 minutes just to think up one whole bar
Decent
Cus my punches crossin over like ghosts doin 187 like they inside of a car
Where does this go?3 line bar?

Overall pretty weak drop..had no real punchlines nothing really hit hard.. elevate learn to make personals and punchlines going to your opponent not random stuff.

Cdusit
kids facing a lost cause like the never ending story..theres no end in sight
he a confused protester..I told him not to bite he yelled " I defend my right"
Decent opener
Id say somthing funny, he replies with "but"......reinforcing his position**
asked him to battle......fag needed an hour to make a decision
Okay..could have been alot better
I havent written generic wack punches for a fucking while
mainly because i dont want to bite Street Scripture's style
Decent
moments have past so i was going to use this line as a filler
but kids getting rapped in this battle...and im not refering to the star of thriller****
Naw
I guess i shouldnt be so hard and end this on a freindly note
but Street Scripture reminds me of broke resturant customers....
........cant pay so he pretend he choked!!!!
Lol..decent closer

Overall pretty one-sided battle and my vote goes to Cdusit

This was feedback posted for Cdusit
 

Stick too topicals :cool: .

lol @ daubs.... Im tryna learn for the fuck of learning...

Thanks for the votes..up for more

Voted For: Cdusit

imma give this one to Cdusit, although it was quite close. Cdusit's structure was a lot more even (maybe a couple of bars were stretched) than SD's, plus SD had a 7 line verse which makes it end a bit weaker. i was feelin' Cdusit's punches quite a lot more aswell especially his closer:

I guess i shouldnt be so hard and end this on a freindly note
but Street Scripture reminds me of broke resturant customers....
........cant pay so he pretend he choked!!!!
^^^that was hot lol

i liked your opener SD, but i think it kinda fell off from there, and you also used quite a basic rhyme scheme. There's always room for elevation though, so work on usin' more complex vocab and bein more creative wit your punches, cuz that wins battles.

quite close but i gotta give this one to Cdusit

no hate....

thanks for the vote upping for more .

Thx to me c got some exposure there, nobody even vote for me, mines was horrible, I want him to win this and get this shit over with.