ayyo new shit from para....hot shit
 

"A Lyrical Universe"
www.soundclick.com/Paranoid05

Verse1: Paranoid
Hook: Paranoid
Verse2: Paranoid
Verse3: Paranoid
Mixing: Paranoid

thanks for the looks, but i'ma give y'all a header. well some shit seems forced cuz i some what rushed it, i was thinkin bout re-recordin it but I dont feel like it anymore. I'll move on but yea

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Beats cool

Your voice is robotic..decent lyrics tho..but just seems like your reading
your lyrics..deliverly isnt too good that needs improvement..flow is aight
tho choppy in bits and falls off a few times..quality is meh
Not bad track tho. keep at it

thanks

upp

word yo
first things worst
"Lyrical Universe?" lol sound kinda corny
but word lets see...

your voice do sound VERY robotic, not good.
im not quite sure what can help you there, but word lol
emotion kinda ehh, you still gotta work on that...it did get better as the track went on, but it still seem like you reading.
flow is ok, it falls off here and there, but its ok
lyrics is nice, but ye some lines is stretched
i think my fav verse was second
hook is kind aehh, like i said earlier..lyrical universe is kinda corny, so i found the hook kinda corny

overall its ok, you gotta work on a few things though man. but you are getting better.
hit me back famz

yea it does sound corny, I found that out once I just kept listening over and over to the hook, I do sound robotic ayy, its cool its just the effect I gave it I think. this wasn't my best at all it sounds bad.

wait for my new shit.

upp