critique my new peice
 

I'm not the one to be polite
I'm the one to pick the fight
got the hardest punch on this planet
like a fistfull of hard granite
who wants to come on an test this?
mowin' down raw eggs for breakfast
stronger than Steve Austin from Texas
i'd Drop him with my own Stunner
have him bleeding from the nostril
Leave him lay'd up in the hospital
and ten months in a rehab hostel
Have Vince Mcmahon wanting to hire me
have him bulk up the crowd admission fee
People wanna cheer for me
like they did for the great Ali
when they see me they explode
louder than bombs goin' off in bali

Its a little plain and simple......

elevate in ya wordplay a little homie...

each line you dropped is a little too short also, but you'll get better with practice, keep elevatin

check out my drop in the freestyle section called 'I'm Just Rhymin....'

Peace.