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Parsa 11-20-05 08:30 PM

Jumper - The Sucide Edition:PT1
 
Chorus
your just ready to give up, cause your fed up with pain,
but don’t do yourself in, keep your head up and sane,
you think no one sees it, as your faking the strife,
and so it seems a surprise, as your taking your life,


jumper:
as I walk on this bridge, no one knows of my thoughts,
that im fed up with this life, and im long ago lost,
everyone’s moving fast, as I watch all the cars sail,
slowly I get the courage, to climb over the guard rail,
nobody cares, not a person has noticed im here,
maybe its better that way, cause im broken with fear,
maybe its better that way, say goodbye, now im ready to jump,
I hear a voice behind me, who calm and steady says, “SON”,


negotiator:
son I know what your thinking, cause I’ve been there before,
been at the point of despair, cause I’ve been scared and ignored,
but let me tell you first hand, that this isnt the way,
things all will work out, all things will be pleasant one day,
we can help you son, im trying to save you neck with this pledge,
but if that is to happen, you must step off of this ledge,
don’t let the pain take over, and don’t dare let the sorrow win,
you’ll be glad that you didn’t, once tomorrow begins,


Chorus
your just ready to give up, cause your fed up with pain,
but don’t do yourself in, keep your head up and sane,
you think no one sees it, as your faking the strife,
and so it seems a surprise, as your taking your life,


jumper:
my life has always been messed up, now its taken a churned end,
but I appreciate the words, and thanks for the concern friend,
but I just don’t deserve this here life that I live,
I tried shooting myself, and I tried slicing my wrists,
but things have gotten so bad now, they’ll never go back,
my world is constantly grey, and will forever grow black,
suicide is the only way that I can expect to achieve,
now that’s my opinion, and if you respect it, then you’ll leave,


negotiator:
young man just listen, step down cause I know how you feel,
like all the pain that’s inside, is unknown yet its real,
my words have not fell through, don’t jump into evil and hell dude,
cause I meant what I said, we have people to help you,
you aint even twenty, you should be livin in prime,
take the help I offered you, or at least give it a try,
I extend the plan, but it depends on your stand,
I’ll say it once more man, come on and lend me your hand,


Chorus
your just ready to give up, cause your fed up with pain,
but don’t do yourself in, keep your head up and sane,
you think no one sees it, as your faking the strife,
and so it seems a surprise, as your taking your life,


jumper:
I know people like you, you fakers aren’t right though,
try to help me out now, but later im a psycho,
you aint foolin no one, cause ya fables are formal,
think im stupid? I’ll never be labeled as normal,
cause soon I’ll be gone, from earth dead and departed,
from talking to you, im worse off then when I started,
I look back to them all, as I take my last breath,
and close my eyes as I slip, as I face my sad death,


negotiator:
NO!...and yet I knew it, slowly another ones robbed,
I need to give up, holy mother im not good at this job,
isn’t there anyone else who can help these freaks under stress,
now look at this fool, who the hell is gonna clean up this mess,
I don’t know what their thinking, when they stop here and think,
ahhh I need a cigarette, and someone get me a drink,
everyday somethin new, and still evil ta face me,
but no matter what happens, these people are crazy,


Chorus
your just ready to give up, cause your fed up with pain,
but don’t do yourself in, keep your head up and sane,
you think no one sees it, as your faking the strife,
and so it seems a surprise, as your taking your life,



i left a few things open on purpose....like WHY the jumper was killing himself, i didnt want anyone to feel left out if i described it to much, also the last part by the negotiator....hope yall get that too, anyway give me some feedback

Past Tense 11-20-05 08:35 PM

DAMN THIS SHIT IS DOPE I WAS FEELIN THIS LIKE CRAZY

man this was mad hot.....lol..wow you need too record this cuz its hot as hell


i'm voting this HOF material so you get my vote

Parsa 11-20-05 08:36 PM

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=215108 <--- Feed

THANKS For the Feed Past Tense-

Past Tense 11-20-05 10:10 PM

uppin dis for my boy Parsa

Critic 11-21-05 08:57 AM

This was dope !! dam first thing I thought after I finished reading was I need
to hear this on audio with a dope beat !!

This was nice stay up and keep writing !!

1~

Indeph 11-21-05 08:59 AM

damn, this was ill. I loved it. I love... you. :love:

Parsa 11-21-05 09:41 AM

*Thanks for the Feed on the Open Mic* Upping for some more*

Viva 11-21-05 01:35 PM

yeah that was dope, simple vocabulary but really good. it would def be dope as a 2 person audio collab.

Bonafide 11-21-05 06:44 PM

This is hot right here. Your vocab was simple which i thought made it flow perfect. Definitely one of the best i've read. Keep writing man. Peace.


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