Attacks reputations with facts and devastation atone
 

Attacks reputations with facts and devastation atone
Sins and make domes spin, at home begin relations and bone
Girls, attach photo then dispatch logo and this catch a bozo
Looking cross eyed got boss pride my skin’s brown like coco
Go through the game silently but blamed violently for ripping
Microphones and stripping domes naked of knowledge, scheme gripping
Bones and like Scotty Pippin gone slam-dunk on a damn punk for real
So pass the basket-ball this is drastic yall may luck up and get a Lakers deal
Marriage is savage with ties of affection tries change directions
But too late I’m stuck, the evil majority has legal authority rejection
Is their policy hostility begin and silly never wins the election
My computer mousse gleaming after house cleaning manage to dust
It off so I stay max with Ajax, attain goals in a game bold it’s a must
Wanna be legit, wise sincerely but instead criticize severely for being
Real attacked with intent to kill continue to invent ill rhymes fleeing
Off paper hard and soft vapor toss skyscrapers like earthquake plus skiing
Down slopes, flow best and molest many with plenty of aroma I’m seeing
Change that’s strange cats should rearrange their wild style just to arrive
At success, survive and impress folk now I have less hope dust on my archive
Brush it off and crush the loft of homes like leaky roofs this how I strive

another real quality drop from you in not long at all.

You got some talents there, the vocab was really good, you do use your words well. Some nice rhymes and the multitude of similar sounding sylables made the flow very easy to follow and appealing to read.

If il be honest it needed something of an umph to keep attention. I mean it needed a bit of a funny line or something really clever and the every line doesnt need to follow on from the line before if you get me..?
Usually keep that up for about 2-4 lines at a time.

But im a real fan of yours which is why im being brutal this was a really good peice and for someone who i dont see about a lot in the battles and discussions you are good :thumbup:

Im serious if you need a crew to get with for a little while you got a place waiting for you in the gods of war