JonK vs ¤ÐÅž¤
 

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6 - 8UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 11-24-05 at 04:31 PM

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JonK has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-24-05 04:01 PM.

¤ÐÅž¤ you said that i shouldnt battle technique i should battle you
ya ass gon get worked so bad ima make ya vet ass look like a fool
im on da mic n spit by the time im don ya mouth gon be full of drool
i want you to know that ya fuckin ass best not choke on my stage
nobody cares if ya die even if ya famous it wont make the front page
im bringing my very first text battle win to my record on rap verse
battlin me is like fighting me on da streets ya bound to end up ina herse
you would end up with six shots with blood leaking clean threw ya shirt
now its almost the time i end my verse n burry ya ass six feet under dirt
damn i just murked ya fuckin ass so bad it should be considered murdah
ne other haters wanna battle im just gon do the same here and have ta serve yah

¤ÐÅž¤ has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-24-05 04:26 PM.

so ya hyped to challenge me & prolly hafta bite to dismantle D,
cuz ya rappings all wrong..
........so ill leave ya method-dissed like a type of christianity,
see my opener alone destroys ya whole verse you dumb slut,
hell, just call me coach the way im delivering these cuts,
why accept this battle..? your dead meat needin a gurney
i mean this kids whole defence is wacked
.................................... like i just murdered his attourny
just 1 more thing thou, you should learn to be more timid kid,
cuz you gotta be wack to say 8-10........unlimited....
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Daz

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

Jonk Verse
¤ÐÅž¤ you said that i shouldnt battle technique i should battle you
ya ass gon get worked so bad ima make ya vet ass look like a fool
^ um no...1st line is jus talk second line again jus talk

im on da mic n spit by the time im don ya mouth gon be full of drool
^ no not feeling it wheres the punch?, diss?, personal?

i want you to know that ya fuckin ass best not choke on my stage
nobody cares if ya die even if ya famous it wont make the front page
^ no not feeling it setup poor @ punch was weak

im bringing my very first text battle win to my record on rap verse
battlin me is like fighting me on da streets ya bound to end up ina herse
^ i had to bold the 1st line coz...knowing Daz's verse (and i haven't looked @ it yet, this isn't going to happen today and 2nd line was A) played B) mega played on the gangsta topic & C) ultra mega wack in combining the both

you would end up with six shots with blood leaking clean threw ya shirt
now its almost the time i end my verse n burry ya ass six feet under dirt
^ again no...1st line gangsta shits played and so's the 2nd line...take note...no-1 cares about shooting people in their lyrics no more...this ain't G-Unit.com

damn i just murked ya fuckin ass so bad it should be considered murdah
ne other haters wanna battle im just gon do the same here and have ta serve yah
^ closer wack, self-gloried no diss...too gangsta...too generic...meh

Overall
To be truthful...you've stepped into the wrong place if you think you will consistantly beat some of the best heads on this site with shit like that...start from the bottom and work your way up...i haven't even peeped Daz's verse yet and already i know who to vote for...my suggestion to you is you need more experience...keep at it though this feeds intended to help...but i think you gassed yaself up too much in this verse and in yourself to be battling at this stage already :thumbup:

¤ÐÅž¤ Verse

so ya hyped to challenge me & prolly hafta bite to dismantle D,
cuz ya rappings all wrong..
........so ill leave ya method-dissed like a type of christianity,
^ 3 line bars = hide stretched structure...but diss is ok punch is ok nothing wowing

see my opener alone destroys ya whole verse you dumb slut,
hell, just call me coach the way im delivering these cuts,
^ self-glory...punch ok...again nothing outstanding

why accept this battle..? your dead meat needin a gurney
i mean this kids whole defence is wacked
.................................... like i just murdered his attourny
^ lol nice bar boo @ 3 line setup but best bar out the 2 verses so far

just 1 more thing thou, you should learn to be more timid kid,
cuz you gotta be wack to say 8-10........unlimited....
^ LOL @ this closers good personal and it's funny...because it's true (although it says 6-8UNLIMITED LINES) i know what ya mean

Overall
Disapointing...if it wasn't for those 2 last ones i prolly wouldn't even be voting for you...but you prolly knew what to expect...jus don't do that too often...coz this verse isn't match winning material...jus lucky 1st guy had nothing to win it with...

Vote¤ÐÅž¤

because it's the quality over quantity that won this...not ya gangsta ish rubbish...but 2 closing bars were only reasonable things out this whole battle...¤ÐÅž¤ up ya anty for christ sake lol :thumbup:

um, yea, thx 4 the vote...i didntr think my verse was that bad:shrugs:
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so uppin for more votes, lets close this quick

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

¤ÐÅž¤ - Gotta be even more whack to say 8-10, when he said 6-8.. lol, other then that tho, good wordplay, and it flowed well.

Best Line - just 1 more thing thou, you should learn to be more timid kid,
cuz you gotta be wack to say 8-10........unlimited....

Worst Line - so ya hyped to challenge me & prolly hafta bite to dismantle D,
cuz ya rappings all wrong..
........so ill leave ya method-dissed like a type of christianity,

JonK - You had a good flow, some iight punches.

Best Line - ¤ÐÅž¤ you said that i shouldnt battle technique i should battle you
ya ass gon get worked so bad ima make ya vet ass look like a fool

Worst Line - im bringing my very first text battle win to my record on rap verse
battlin me is like fighting me on da streets ya bound to end up ina herse

OVERALL - Daz won this battle for sure, his punches were hitten hard, he had good wordplay. JonK you flowed well, but your punches wernt on the same level as Daz. Come more creative next time.

Vote - Daz

RTF in SIG!

uppin for a couple more votes, lets cl;ose this yo

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

Absolutely no punchlines, just rhyming

VS.

so ya hyped to challenge me & prolly hafta bite to dismantle D,
cuz ya rappings all wrong..
........so ill leave ya method-dissed like a type of christianity,
why accept this battle..? your dead meat needin a gurney
i mean this kids whole defence is wacked
.................................... like i just murdered his attourny
just 1 more thing thou, you should learn to be more timid kid,
cuz you gotta be wack to say 8-10........unlimited....


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Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

Daz killed JonK, jonk's punches were way to basic and some of it didn't make sense, doesn't matter how much you elevate, you still need good punches, daz was un elevated but you only had two good punches, which stomped on jonks shit...

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

uhh, only read half the other dudes verse, and there were no punches...everyline in daz's verse had a decent punch, so that beats the other dude right there.....i liked the attourny line, word....just elevate junk, or whatever your name is

v/daz