Intermental - Song Cry (hot shit)
 

Yo peep this track..

This is a real outro, 3 verses of hot emotional finishing touches on the soul rebel mixtape..my uncle died durin the makin of this track, so im dedicatin this to him inderictly, hope he RIP..holla atcha boi..peep game..

WWW.SOUNDCLICK.COM/INTERMENTAL

"SONG CRY"

HOLLA ATCHA BOI..VOTE HOT IF U LIKE IT :)

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=215766
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=215571

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tracks ive fed on

need more HIGHS on ur vocals...too much rumble/lows


and I'm not exactly sure I like using Jay's hook verbatim...unless you put a new spin on it, which you didn't do


Your rhyming has def. elevated a lot since you first started rappin...It was very simple and now it's solid at best



lyrics personal = good


flow was adequate, if not uninspired...cud be more expressive...that goes along with delivery...rather bland for this type of track...

And, in my opinion, you didn't put enough of a different spin on this track to make me forget about Jay's version, the problem when you re-do a song or use a famous beat.


Pretty decent track dawg

keep droppin

thanks homie......

Holy Shit

Dope Sample

Vocals Lil Low


FIrst Verse

Yeah Flows dope

Delivery Like Yours :) Love That Whisper:):):)


Emotion In This I Feel


THis Is Deep

Lyrcis Are Nice As Hell Love Em

Hook Word @ Delay/Reverb

Upp Vocals THo Lil Low As I Sed

2nd Verse

Same As Above But I Feel The Lyrics Better

And Hook Again Lol

3rd Comes On

Same As Above But Lyrcis Doper Lol

Its like YOu Build it up Love It

I Feel This A Lot Word To Dedicating It To Your Uncle

Hope Hes In A Better Place

OIverall 8/10

Good Drop

thanks dawg I apreciate that..........

Where Did You Get The Beat For Looking Back From?

^^^thanks fo that great feed...and i cant remember !/....upp