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Colorless
It's only abstract to ask that I'm half black
And half white like the clouds I see right? But the skin reflects another image in the mirror Like if you seen through glasses foggy so clear I hate to be identified by certain colors Don't won't be seen in a rainbow that doesn't cover My philosophy on others biography read by these eyes Manipulated by the truth as if preachers told these lies About where we're from and how we came About when we started and who to blame If Jesus is white, then I'm Chris Farley I'm pouring out my guts in this cup, take this darling Take it, drink it! Don't forget to swallow This isn't wine portrayed as blood to follow I thought so. You can't take away who I am Just remember that Mary had a little lamb. |
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This was decent, the first few bars didnt rhyme well but it would of worked better as a poem. I liked the concept cause it was original but the imagery needed to be a bit more graphic to really grab the readers attention. The flow was off no multies so it lacked complexity in some parts. I think you need to rewrite this cause i liked the content but the imagery and flow needs some improvement.
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Aight no doubt. Thanks on the feed.
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I tried. Up Up and away in this biatch!!
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