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Young Days Bad Ways
Now listen, I gotta story to tell
about going through hell about a boy, a girl, a nigga going through hell...Listen Only the nigga was me Only this nigga could see Whatt was going on...In this nigga universal stream He had a brother... named Jermaine He was a gangsta...at 12 years of age He slang tha E, cocaine and grain To them niggas...straight by the bay But while doing missions...in the middle grade He had a moracco chick straight down with his game...eh He liked her, she liked him But she liked nigga...which was not him...yup She liked me...an older version of him...damn She was kinda cute...and her ass was mean But there was one problem...she was only 13 She crept up on me...but she was only 13 I couldn't touch her, I couldn't fuck her...Plus She was already fuckin my brother...yup He wanted to make her his significant other No, I wouldn't do this...to my brother I tried to leave...she started followin She sat me down...unzipped my pants and started shallowin my dick, then her tongue started followin Then opened the door My brother swung opened the door He dropped his digi and his bag flung open on tha floor Rolled out his fifth...screamed "How could you do this whore?" Then she dropped... |
that was tight i liked it
good use of imagry and multis and you have good story tellin presense i actaully got into that albeit short but nonetheless rtf on my open mic "when im gone rmx ft. robby mccallister" |
I liked this one right here.Completely different style from the rest of these other cats.Storyline and everything was good,easy to follow...not really bad....Except,you rhymed the same words a lot during it...so,yea..
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this was a nice piece, good flow it was story like, rhymes are repetive at times but its cool...try makeing your lines the same length so the whole verse well have a better flow...but all around good piece
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Closed no links , pm me two links and ill re-open this
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