+Common Passion+
 

Long Time, no siege...

So amazing, my passions race through a maze to chase me
the placing of a crazy face on a genius, I'm the best eire, face it
a musician and a don with apassioned musings, and uses this
the music chooses me to abuse and use the fusion and confussion
giving breath to a mutation that's been in reservation till creation talks
recover from a wrong site placing for a plantation, station for Ax Dogg
my lfe is recondite and I reconnoitered it for your recourse
I reconsidered myself, Like a Jedi Knight I'll use the force
My protection can't be afected by any nation, I'm the bastion
Got the last on fashion, I'm the representation of a common Passion
Ax tracks the enemy back the the traps In more than a thousend laps
and a thousend miles are left into files while the dogg survives trials

----I told ya, Ax would come stronga---

link:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2563830

Uppin...............

this is descent with a average topic. You need to connect with the reader and try to make it flow better....rtf

nothing special, rhymes were forced n shit..up ya emotion n imagery towards the topic.
Your structure had some stretched n some not...idk not feeling this man..elevate

4/10

this not bad bu ta lot of bragging going on so my advice to you is venture out further for topics bu tkeep up the good work and you do have skills

Wow... that's all I can say that shit bro.

thanx ya'll....