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.LeFt. 12-11-05 03:23 AM

My One. And OnlY.
 
guess whom im thinkin of? (who)
Guess whom is my first Love? (who)
yes you. . .................
i think about it your the one for me
Could possibly.
we were the ones meant to be
im always here for you. .
belive me.. cuz my love is always true
ill love u from the end to the Start
till F. O. E. V. E. R.
you the on i look up to
i cant be affraid
your the on i can depend.
show my true feelings you
your always down for me
never keeps a frown on me
always a smile thats worth a while
your the one for me
we the ones that meant to be
buh your MY L.O.V.E

Po' Wit. 12-11-05 01:41 PM

This piece is better than your other piece but once again, nothing amazing. Your vocab is still nothing jaw dropping. Your emotion is there but nothing too amazing. It was heart-felt which is key, and your structure was much better than other poem.

Overall about a 5/10 , better than other piece though.

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.LeFt. 12-14-05 07:29 PM

k. thanks for the help. anyone else has other desicions?


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