X.celent vs Young Un...
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X.celent has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-16-05 02:44 PM.
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My rhymes are drastic , your punches are fake like Plastic Some1 said your audio was dope and u knew he was sarcastic(his sig) . . This dude has no brains and hes losing like a retard playing chess And your rhymes are like your verse , long and just plain pointless Im not on your level ha your funny but i guess its kinda true Only if u warnt counting the 8658890 people that are above you Your wack you were good bck in the day its time to fucking retire And its like Cs is like your verse the way theyre already expired Your not sick and any who beleives it is a stupid ignorant fool Cuz your faking ta sickness like a kid who dont wanna go 2 school |
Young Un... has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-16-05 03:25 PM.
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Have U Layed-Down-To-Rest My Game-Is-The-Best Ur Life Gets Slated-With-Techs.. And I Hope U Have 'Wesley Snipes In Ya Heart' Cause Imma Put A 'Blade'-In-Ya-Chest..!! Im Impailing-The-Fifth..Roam The Streets With The Mac-And-The-Inf..Rap-Up-This-Shit.. I Aint Into 'Scary Movies' Dawg So I Heard Enough Tales-From-This-Crypt (Crip)..!! I Onli Play-With-This-Text..Allow Me Just To Say Whos-The-Best..Im The Greatest-No-Stress.. And Wen Im Spraying-The-Tech I'll Leave A 'Shell In Ya Ass' Like U Laying-An-Egg..!! Just Take This Loss-Kid My Guns 'Spray' Like A-Faucet Im Ill I Don’t Force-It..Not-Often.. U Distraught-Bitch..How Is U Gangsta Wen U Stay On The 'Net Longer' Than A Caught-Fish..!! Xcelent U Shuld Pick-Ya-Casket This Shit-Is-Drastic Distraught-Action Wen U Rapped-In-Plastic.. Convict-This-Bastard..N 'Pierce Ya Chest' Like Wearin Paul's-Jersey-Backwords |
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Voted For: Young Un...
XCELENT: Shit was basic...had a few good lines..you gotta up the vocab u had sum amusing punches...flow was good Flow: 5/5 Structure: 4/5 Vocab: 1/5 Punches: 2/5 Funny: 3/5 Your wack you were good bck in the day its time to fucking retire And its like Cs is like your verse the way theyre already expired Your not sick and any who beleives it is a stupid ignorant fool Cuz your faking ta sickness like a kid who dont wanna go 2 school ure best bit... yung Structure was so over board it sucked so much lol..it was so hard to flow to it alot dawg cos it was so stretched so structure :1/5 Flow: 2/5 Punches: 5/5 Vocab: 5/5 Funny: 4/5 lines were dope but stretched...u got this |
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Voted For: Young Un...
My rhymes are drastic , your punches are fake like Plastic Some1 said your audio was dope and u knew he was sarcastic(his sig) ...good This dude has no brains and hes losing like a retard playing chess And your rhymes are like your verse , long and just plain pointless ....wack Im not on your level ha your funny but i guess its kinda true Only if u warnt counting the 8658890 people that are above you ...corny,sounds like something a lil kid would write Your wack you were good bck in the day its time to fucking retire And its like Cs is like your verse the way theyre already expired ...ehh,your wording was bad, Your not sick and any who beleives it is a stupid ignorant fool Cuz your faking ta sickness like a kid who dont wanna go 2 school ...REALLY played Have U Layed-Down-To-Rest My Game-Is-The-Best Ur Life Gets Slated-With-Techs.. And I Hope U Have 'Wesley Snipes In Ya Heart' Cause Imma Put A 'Blade'-In-Ya-Chest..!! ...Good Im Impailing-The-Fifth..Roam The Streets With The Mac-And-The-Inf..Rap-Up-This-Shit.. I Aint Into 'Scary Movies' Dawg So I Heard Enough Tales-From-This-Crypt (Crip)..!! ...Ok I Onli Play-With-This-Text..Allow Me Just To Say Whos-The-Best..Im The Greatest-No-Stress.. And Wen Im Spraying-The-Tech I'll Leave A 'Shell In Ya Ass' Like U Laying-An-Egg..!! ..Too gorish for my liking Just Take This Loss-Kid My Guns 'Spray' Like A-Faucet Im Ill I Don’t Force-It..Not-Often.. U Distraught-Bitch..How Is U Gangsta Wen U Stay On The 'Net Longer' Than A Caught-Fish..!! ...Played Xcelent U Shuld Pick-Ya-Casket This Shit-Is-Drastic Distraught-Action Wen U Rapped-In-Plastic.. Convict-This-Bastard..N 'Pierce Ya Chest' Like Wearin Paul's-Jersey-Backwords ...Good.. Ok,Young UN.. got this. X.Celent.. your wording sucked in this battle,and it messed up some lines..like the C.S one.And the kids.illness.school line is played out.So work on wording and creativity. V/Young Un.. Drop an honest vote in the link below please... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=213623 |
Thank You....Will Rtf In A min Jus Recordin This Track:) Pz
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This was feedback posted for Young Un...
You have a good rhyme scheme but this seems to make your actual punches lack impact. The punches I thought were strongest were played concepts. I mean I thought you had a decent flip but line such as:
I Onli Play-With-This-Text..Allow Me Just To Say Whos-The-Best..Im The Greatest-No-Stress.. And Wen Im Spraying-The-Tech I'll Leave A 'Shell In Ya Ass' Like U Laying-An-Egg..!! Just Take This Loss-Kid My Guns 'Spray' Like A-Faucet Im Ill I Don’t Force-It..Not-Often.. U Distraught-Bitch..How Is U Gangsta Wen U Stay On The 'Net Longer' Than A Caught-Fish..!! .. Have been done before. You have a nice rhyme scheme but I though your actual punches lacked originality. |
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There was nothing here that took me. I mean the rhyme scheme was basic & your punches were not witty, original nor powerful. Overall too basic, just making statements that lacked much skill. V/ Young Un http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=217324 |
This was feedback posted for Young Un...
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