Sun Moon...some poetical shit...
 

"sun moon"
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3253004






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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=217913
the Q
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=217831
MD

I already told you how I felt about this on AIM. But, I'll drop proper feed here.

Your flow is good for the most part. However, it gets repetitive by the time you get to the "moon" part because it's just a straight, continuous flow. I'd suggest using starts and stops to vary your flow some.

Your delivery was good at some points, lackluster at others. Towards the end of the "earth" part, I was really feeling your lyrics and the energy with which you were spitting. I'd suggest varying the tone/pitch of your voice at times to add variety to your delivery.

The beat was fine. I enjoyed the "sun" part the most, the "moon" part the least, and appreciated the lyrics in the "earth" part.

Overall, this was a creative and very insightful piece. Your lyrics ranged from decent, to good, to quite thought provoking. This is a good drop that would be better with a more dynamic flow/delivery scheme.


Nice one


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sun moon?
nigga
lol
what happened to what I told you to name it?

forget wut u said...n yea..name could proly b better...ehh

it was lyrically Celestial
or just Celestial
it was some shit that had Celestial in it

*takes wills advice real quick*

My negga droppin it..nice one..u elevating quick track by track

man....the x-mas wack-off...is always the best wack off IMO...anyway uppp up n away !

uppin this for my man









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