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hi everyone im new to this site
names grimsly but i did it wrong..says grmsly..works both ways really

this is some lyrics i did bout 2 days ago bout some girl i knoq
i put down the 2 feed links or something..if ive done it wrong jus tell me and i'll fix it

but give me some feedback on this please

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=218118
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...1046post2591046


When I was young I was stupid robbing things, being-a-thief
Smoking weed drinking vodka with my bitch feeling-no-grief
Babe I don’t, dwell-on-my-past, I always usually tell-when-I’m-outclassed
just when I thought we had a chance to talk you made me feel amassed
what a surprise, your eyes are always saying ‘hypno-tize-me’
Creeping up behind-me with your hips looking-so-wise-we
Was young and full-of-heart, had this love right from-the-start
Your a bulls-eye to me bitch cos your hearts just full-of-darts
Why did we do this, I thought we had a chance to fix-it
My love for you is strong and deep I’m willing to commit to it
Was hard at first, But now I see just how you loved to kiss-me
Creeping up behind-me with your lips looking so fine-see
I love the way you move your body, shake that-ass-too
I’ll have to-pass-you this comdon, stick on boo
And if you wanna’ rock-too, Grmsly got it locked, true.
I need you to be there for me when im feelin down you
Should Listen to me as i preech our love and our problems
You said you loved me but you wanted it more with comdoms
So i went straight out and robbem them, i love you truely baby
You rule me baby, nothing takes your love from me its crazy
Inside in my soul up in my heart, where ever boo its torn apart
Why didnt you warn my heart, should of told me this from the start
But it dosnt matter now i guess you've left and im trying
To stop crying all the time cos my loves gone and im lying
When i said it didnt matter when it did, i love you
Belive me when i say it boo, my love is deep so pure and true
Look Its deep inside me, i'll rap my words these lines be
Flippin all over the place, trippin for love baby Love see
things like my rhymes always love you babe they find me
when im feelin low and kick my flow out like that line see
I love this, i spit my lyrics perfectly cos my rhyme be
So fine see and i be, Missin you and your soft thigh's we
ShOuld be together love forever i need you now girl
And i'll never let you go you'll always be mind in my safe world

pretty good drop a bit simple but keep up your work homie.......n ty 4 the feedback on my diss track 2 the morons of rv

safe man....dnt think anyone else liked it..lol