first time
 

first time so give me some slack....

S to the Z freestylen' newbie.
on the mic spitin lines as far as yall can see.
see me spit up for free.
got hommies on the other side tryin to bust me fees.
like they bill collecters charging tax.
yea well ima give them something when i snap back.
leave them twisted and dissed.
physicly abused and emotionaly pissed.
first time on the mic. and already im in the list.
ppl say im insane, beat my self up, and cut my wrist.
well fuck them, they dont know me.
fuck with me again and get tossed ina chokehold freenzy.
thats my time i got to roll
im bless that my spit has 15% flow.

lol yep yep that is jack shit..... tell me wut u think and break down wut i need to inprove. thankz

hey man whats good? For ur first time its aight, nothin special. U should add more vocab, multies and internal rhymin. To get an idea, look at some of the open mics that are in the hall of fame or some that have a lot of good comments. Please return the favor and read my open mic called Runnin'. The link's in my sig, aight peace.