just some shit uppin holla back
 

im just living a life of crime
been in the pen a dozen times
17,000 dollars in burglary fines
time to get me mines
is you eliterate nigga read between the lines
im a pimp and im still dotting the i's
be like the jeffersons getting a slice of yo pie
not the one on the table one between yo thighs
? is Why because i love the taste 15 years
thats like a michael jackson case
i jack yo face
getting some reception off the tip of your prace
s mtv2 see so many different faces
calm down shorty wide open spaces
add the bed divide the legs times the facelift
i trie to addapt to threads
if i lie y im capping feds
blasting heads taking of torsos
leave scars like when the leprachaun pogos
be like mike johns on my name exspress my vocals
vatos locos yeah im crazy even if you was slim i'd still call you shady

This was aight, really nothin special. Didnt seem like u put time into, since its short too. Vocab was aight just for this short piece. Flow was really anything too much and i think u need to make ur lines a lil longer cuz it was a lil choppy for me but anyways keep elevatin aight peace.

lmao at "if u elliterate n*^^@ read between the lines" thats on 50's many men...and wit "im a pimp and im still dotting the lines" ur makin a reference to 50's p.i.m.p

lmafo............................................. .................

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thanks for the feed back just looking to get better

uppin yaw hit up with some feed back