onestepbeyond vs allik war
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Biting
no hata votes
no dick riding votes
votes must be given the proper way that is explain in this forums rules
and if you a bitch who talk shit or just simply be hating dont waste your time in my battle cuz i will make sure everything described above is respected :thefinger :thumbup:

btw good lil bitch

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 01-14-06 at 07:46 PM

Must drop verse in 7200 minutes after check in.

allik war has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-09-06 07:47 PM.

OneStepBeyond has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-10-06 11:31 AM.

10 days to check and drop... Lmfao.



We can battle text or audio..... Just cause I'm hott as hell,
I'll put 2 losses under your name... like you dropped the L's.
Ya sayin' you struggled... but sorry cuz this ain't a movie kid,
Only time your girls 'bye' is when she realized who shes with,*
You're fillin your raps worse......... i'm all killin this cat's words,
say i'm wack and ya dope? i think that raw killa is backwards,
Damn.... Look boy, I'd use your sig. against you but look it cat,
Scope the shit for personals and don't know what i'm lookin at,
You ain't gonna become black, accept that you're white dawg,
Ain't shit changin no matter how many pic's you take with the lights off...

You even suck at that, what you jumped off some kids boat,
And tried to drown yourself and forgot that SHIT floats?



*He says his girl is bi. Only one I feel the need to explain...

hated on cuz im white steadily scream nigga,
"man allik war jus 1 hell of fuckin wigga"
why the fuck ya'll tryin 2 steady figure
da muthafuckin man behind my picture?//

onestepbeyond said hes gonna beat me,
i gave my address 2 come meet me,
but continue's 2 do nuttin but e-greet me,
1 of 20+ pussies who wanna defeat me//

fuck a metaphor i'll spell it out 4 u F-U-C-K Y-O-U,
this a rapsite but ya aviator show u jus a punk dude,
bang yo head against this wall :banghead:..............
like eminem"to all the people ive offended...yea F*U*2"//

hate all you want I told you " i just dont give a fuck",
but 2day,2marrow,& da next day "I still dont give a fuck"

punchin ya keyboard the only time,u can punchline(s),
im barely breakin a sweat when its crunch time,
THA Q said u aint a rapper,so wuts up wit beinan actor
performin a bully role like we was set in a school lunch time//

i break barriers of luv & hate,give new meanin 2 luvin 2 rape,
onestepbeyond,while im beyond all steps yet he stuck by 1,
havin pure fun while he stuck behind the window like drapes//

fuck it dats good enough don't care neva said i was a battle rapper i write classics i save the battles 4 emcees like eminem......get started wit the votes but absolutely no hate,dick ridin,hatin votes...nuttin but pure honest votes from realpeople like my rues state good luck...peace

and for your information you dumb fuck the lights are oncuz thats the only way our cam will work properly is if there's light n im guessin u neva lived in an rv or even went on vacation in 1 cuz if u did u would know rv lights suckass....nice drop but the shit u spittin old...u sayin the same shit these otha hataz are towards me in my otha battles(reign/dopium,young unf,etc.)good luck though cuz unlike u i have a heart and i am human so i see past the bullshit i see ur computer shittin out....

and for your information you dumb fuck the lights are oncuz thats the only way our cam will work properly is if there's light n im guessin u neva lived in an rv or even went on vacation in 1 cuz if u did u would know rv lights suckass....nice drop but the shit u spittin old...u sayin the same shit these otha hataz are towards me in my otha battles(reign/dopium,young unf,etc.)good luck though cuz unlike u i have a heart and i am human so i see past the bullshit i see ur computer shittin out....rules*

p.s. bi as far as sexual prefrence is spelt bi not bye.....
oh ur closer dont make sense how u gonna jump out a boat and land in water and realize it floats?.....if u were anything close 2 smart and tried killin urself that way ud tie a weight on so when u jump u sink....stupid ass..nice try though...

Lmao, you're an idiot and don't understand punchlines.

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

Wow.

yes i understand punchlines,multi's,personals,structure,flow,everyt hing having 2 do wit writing a rhyme...and no im not an idiot im a intelectually impaired...my mind battles itself in a never winning/never losing battle...my cerebelum is compiled of adverbs and adjectices...cerebrol is made up of verbs and nouns...my cranium is composed of vocabulary,a dictionary,thesaurus,and encyclopedia. im not 1 to brag but my 8th grade teacher loved my essay's and stories...i had an a in her class the whole year.
and my mathmatics was always top of the line blowin away calcutors wit my calculations...but i choose 2 save my knowledge 4 work and school not a website sry ya'll htaz not worth seein my intelectual level! now uppin this battle!

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

closer was funny as hell and good punch man by OneStepBeyond...why battle in this forum dawg....you got skills go to Elevated I will be thewre soon...I am newbie as they call me althoguh I ain't too bad....anyways.....good drop dawg...found it funny throughout and good punches that hit pretty well...!

Allik you are a newb....(these prove it /////)

v/OSB

o.O you the newbie yo ive been doin this rap shit since i was 15 and im 21 now...im not really the battle type ive made that known but i do it 4 practice 2 get betta at battlin but i guarentee i can write a hot song quicker than u can drop ya best 16!...
dont be like these handful of dick ridaz and hataz and come on here str8 startin shit like u kno who da fuck i am...btw no hatin but osb's closer sucked cuz made no sense if u read it and think of it...i described shit wrong/backwards dude can even spell bi* rite since my girl bye* like he said..lol loaser ass bitch...btw 4 future voters dont waste my time...remember that read the rules if u are sumtin in it than leave and make sure the link hits on ur way back 2 the other forums...n e ways thanx 4 the vote dont care who u vote for just dont b startin 2 talk shit like these other dicks who act like pussies! uppin 4 honest votes...

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

allik war

Open:weak
Close:that could've been good but the wording did it in for me
meta:No the meta's were weak
Punches:The punches had potential in a few spots but never really got done right
Multies: I guess technically the same word counts but they weren't used right
Personal: tried to use his name but wasn't great, couldve been though

Osb
Open:It was little more then decent, punch was weak but the concept was good
Close:funny, i actually laughed at that one, Not out loud but it was funny
Metas: pretty good actually
punches:I don't think the punches were so hard hitting but better then war's
Personals: pretty good actually, nothing but actually

v/OsB


war you should stop with the paragraphing, try to work on dissing more and better, be more clever with your metas and punches.....start there, osb you need to hit harder with the punches




this type of voting is wack......by the way RTF or vote wil be erased

would've been funnier to if you'd just put