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technique 01-15-06 10:10 AM

knifes
 
All i think about is blades and they've got aids
I wanna rip you up ther'es nobody more crazed
I wasn't given a life I was just given a knife
that was my reason so that I could survive
I always feel deprived I'm not getting anywhere
I just feel un aware and my lifes such a scare
I'm always feeling alone I'm locked away at home
and don't have no1 I just stay constantly stoned
all my parents do is bitch and always got 2 moan
my lifes been blown I try smother it with my flow
I've been mistreated and been hated and beated
You have no idea what it's like 2 always be defeated
I don't see any changes my minds been fucked for ages
I'm looking at the world and im tormented by my rages

Bonafide 01-15-06 11:09 PM

This was aight, really nothing special at all. Well if its a true freestyle then it'd be aight. Vocab was ok and the flow was nice. And thats about it, nothing really stood out for me in this piece. But keep writing man, Peace.


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