Sinful Error's,Religious Death
 

CLOSE THISSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yea...def. like this beat...rapped to it


beat cud be amped a notch


vocals are clear though


flow is good...I like it


some words tough to decipher


Hook sounds weird

dunno wut ur sayin

all I could make out was "religious death" and that's probably because it's in the title


the deep voice sounded weird too and was comical to me...watch that dawg

maybe it was just me, but it sounded funny IMO


this track seems ambitious...but the unclear lyrics killed it for me



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Thanks............

The Hook Is:

Sinful error's,a religious death
Sillouete of the moon leave you out of breath
The loss of a loved one it's all down to god
He could have saved them all but he let them rot

not a good thing if you have to post the lyrics...:(


1 suggestion, deliver the hook more precisely...use repetition more often...keep it simple



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Aigggghh thanks:-D

Iunno i think i should keep my other voice?

pm me links or send tem to me on aim and ill reopen this

the beat is dope nice pick....the the vocals need a little lowering...lyrics are good....flow sounds shaky maybe it's your accent....delivery is cool nice track.


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