Young Pilgrims
 

Young Pilgrims

A cold and wet November dawn
And there are no barking sparrows
Just emptiness to dwell upon.

I fell into a winter slide
And ended up the kind of kid who goes down chutes too narrow
Just eking out my measly pies.

But I learned fast how to keep my head up 'cause I
Know there is this side of me that
Wants to grab the yoke from the pilot and just
Fly the whole mess into the sea.

Another slow train to the coast
Some brand new gory art from way on high
I sink and then I swim all night.

I watch the ice melt on the glass
While the eloquent young pilgrims pass
And leave behind their trail
Imploring us not to fail.

Of course I was raised to gather courage from those
Lofty tales so tried and true and
If you're able I'd suggest it 'cause this
Modern thought can get the best of you.

This rather simple epitaph can save your hide your falling mind
Fate isn't what we're up against there's no design no flaws to find
There's no design no flaws to find.

But I learned fast how to keep my head up 'cause I
Know I got this side of me that
Wants to grab the yoke from the pilot and just
Fly the whole mess into the sea.

*Shakes Head* I wish you would fallow the rules. I hate closing your shit because your among the few good writers we get in here :(

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2624770
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2624782

Thank you.

Hey Look This Can Hurt A Man's Eyes I Highly Advise You To Enlar5ge You Print What's Wrong? It Was All Right Couldn't Read Half Couldn't See It But What I Read Was Enjoyable Doe

That's standard size print you jackass. I'm not counting this as adequite feedback if you Pm me this link.

SO WHAT YOU TELLING ME WHAT i GOT TO SAY GO FUCK YOOURSELF

You didn't say anything. All you did was complain about his font. How in any way could that ever help him progress as a writer? And don't answer that question... Think about it while you post else where because I'm banning you from here for being an absolute idiot.

Naw Fuckk Head You Banning Me Because I Can Rhyme Circles Aroun You, Bonecollecter And Drake Hell Bonecollecter Won't Post Untile I'm Banned Yall Boys The Wackiest Jealous No T6alent Cats I Ever Had To Deal With

Lumber shut the fuck up........and as for the poem dure dopeness...how long did it take you to write and we should collab. for sho....better yet Barr Atticus and Myself<<<now that would be sick.....great drop keep em coming