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I Am Unreal. vs H.D.
Topical Battle Rules:
6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic: Space as we Know it Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 01-25-06 at 12:42 AM Must drop verse in 1180 minutes after check in. Expired battle close - win |
H.D. has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-22-06 12:42 AM.
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In space light is insignificant even though it's limitless
Take for instantance the fact the stars in pockets of gas Vast cast brilliant reflective waves shimmering across gallaxies The fact that light exist is sort of a fallacy, seeing is believing Those decieving see space is an empty void, dark and desalinate Barren yet filled with chucks of planetery pieces pulled through it murk A chaos set astray when GOD forgot the forces he put at work Results beserk, creative and destructive forces aligned Space is good and evil in and outside the mind Space itself is dark but many suns provide the light Gravitational pulls make dust collide, and in that bring life However meteors and astroriods turn rocks to ash and viods All that is created and deployed in done in space Matter isn't created or destroyed just changes shapes Space is every entity's boundry and there's no escape |
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I Am Unreal. has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-24-06 10:28 PM.
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Space As I Know It
They say aspiring astronauts are admiral souls Advocating life’s questions by amending a role They’re consoled by a zephyr’s breeze… eased By a better tether chaining Earth to human beings Space is perceived as “The infinite extension of the three- Dimensional region… in which all matter exists” But to me it seems to be an end to a means Where bliss escapes me and explores my needs I employ these themes, different as contrasted, but Sometimes I wonder… “Does space go on forever? Or do we just make it such?” I had a hunch, go in search, find truth and live life But as infinite was defined by… “Unlimited in spatial extent” …………………………………My insight died… I knew I’d never know the answers until life passed Or else I’d be chasing something that didn’t exist. Have you ever heard the tale of a child so weary? To ask out a girl that he loved so dearly? He’d write “sincerely, anonymous” to sign his post It was monotonous; clearly a girl can’t see a ghost So she stopped looking, and they boy lost all hope And the story goes; it’s the same for every timid boy But how is timid defined? If you say “Lacking self-confidence” You’re out of your mind. See, being timid is simply being shy, Some would say that clouds sometimes hide the sky… So we see eye to eye. Because there are stars out there just as shy as our great sun And another life form is likely taking to every one… So one day when I become my own shooting star I’ll talk to a wise and aged poet… I know it’s not fact. It’s just space as I know it. |
Space As I Know It
They say aspiring astronauts are admiral souls Advocating life’s questions by amending a role They’re consoled by a zephyr’s breeze… eased By a better tether chaining Earth to human beings Space is perceived as “The infinite extension of the three- Dimensional region… in which all matter exists” But to me it seems to be an end to a means Where bliss escapes me and explores my needs I employ these themes, different as contrasted, but Sometimes I wonder… “Does space go on forever? Or do we just make it such?” I had a hunch, go in search, find truth and live life But as infinite was defined by… “Unlimited in spatial extent” …………………………………My insight died… I knew I’d never know the answers until life passed Or else I’d be chasing something that didn’t exist. Have you ever heard the tale of a child so weary? To ask out a girl that he loved so dearly? He’d write “sincerely, anonymous” to sign his post It was monotonous; clearly a girl can’t see a ghost So she stopped looking, and they boy lost all hope And the story goes; it’s the same for every timid boy But how is timid defined? If you say “Lacking self-confidence” You’re out of your mind. See, being timid is simply being shy, Some would say that clouds sometimes hide the sky… So we see eye to eye. Because there are stars out there just as shy as our great sun And another life form is likely taking to every one… So one day when I become my own shooting star I’ll talk to a wise and aged poet… I know it’s not fact. It’s just space as I know it. -Sorry bout that, had it posted in the wrong place... |
up for a vote or two..................................
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mm vote please.
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Voted For: I Am Unreal.
Dam nice battle by both, both dropped some nice barz but I am takes this battle. HD u come nice, had very nice vocab, flow was nice but was lacking complexity and imaginary.. you verse was written well strong on the basics but was lacking meaning ? u decided to stay on subject but did didn't flip it. I am your verse was very well written,.. flow was nice lost it at a few points but that's cool,.. vocab was nice but your complexity and imaginary was on top. It was just a very well wrtten verse. Vote I am stay up both 1~ |
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This was feedback posted for H.D.
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This was feedback posted for I Am Unreal.
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You guys don't have the same ip adress... douchebags.
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