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My First Drop on RV
when east grabs the mic other rappers wanna go on hiatus...
and when east drops an album all others get "taken off the shelf" like san andreas... i'm listenin to some shit in the rap game let's face it, it's NOT RAP... now i got haters all "on my dick" like a fuckin jock strap... i just wanna kill myself but not because i'm depressed... but just because a dead rappers album is guarentteed success... and i'm sick of all these rappers tryin to act like pac... don't even own a gun and say their gat might cock... pac also went to jail but they don't get locked... just play the end of his career right and go get shot... anyways i grab mag machette the track... kill any wack MC that always said he can rap... i'm getting my stacks heavy like the federal tax... i don't battle free, yup, i know i'm better than that... just a lil something....i'ma punchline rapper at times...this just a lil piece i keyed up... |
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yeah not bad fosho.. flow was constant and good.. i liked that hiatus rhyme... messages were a bit mixed as such in the concepts.. just keep extending the rhyme variations and adding on yo sa'll good pz1 |
thanks for da feed....i prolly shoulda put this in the freestyle part...o well my bad
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You contradicted yourself you said you dont like people who dont own a gun but the gat might cock and then you said you grab the mag and kill emcees...? You ain't never cought no bodys. It didnt flow right to me maybe i was readin it wrong. Elevate.
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just a quick lil drop nothing special....
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yeah, jus keep workin at it...its not tha best but not tha worst either...i actually liked some parts...feelin ya puches, a lil somethin new...i've seen worst first drops...hell, my fuckin first drop was asshole...but yeah, elevate....and return tha fav, link in sig
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thanks for the feed....not really new to rappin just new to the site....didn't take to much time on this piece....keyed it up in 10 minutes....
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Nice drop fam. jess elevate a lil more.
but ova all yo did yo damn thang. U keep doin u an let me see some of yo punchline rapping ability soon............................. |
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true story .... keep workin on your writins this was an overall iight piece .. with a good concept that still could use sum work .. but on sum places i juss got lost .. keep elevating mayne .. |
Yo, kinda simplistic wit that same old gangsta routine... u need to get in tha lifestyle yo
on point tho.... u got tha skillz to elevate and put something good together with a little time and more effort |
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