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Grmsly 02-05-06 10:27 AM

..Missing You..
 
Girl I just Miss you every minute, every hour of the day
Cos any second that goes by, My power dies, its when you say
"I Have To Go" But it dont matter, cos my love for you will stay
And trust i'll pray, Everyday I'll make it right girl your my way
I wont go "Stray", Instead i'll write something about, like an essay
So Belive me when i say i'll never hurt you, I aint stress-ay
I'll be here till the end of time, Even when we turn gray
As i lay here Sitting thinking bout things we do and could say
It makes me wonder, Do you love me? If you do, Just say OKAY
I'm Startin fresh, I'll make some changes, rearrange my whole plan
See i could love you till we die, I Know its strange, But i can
Just understand i poor my heart out, And i hope no other man
Could ever love more then i do, See this love here just expands
So take my hand, We'll live a life of courage, wich has just began
My Heart beats for you like drums, From the slums you made it ran
And the worsts days would be thursday, I'm still-at-college
I'm just, missin you, All the time, So much i spill-that-knowlege
I love the ground you walk-on, The tracks you make and talk-on
I'm a poet, your a poet, Come lets show it while we hawk-on
Girl I Just Wish, Just One Kiss, Could make my life seem easy
Your Always teasin me, The way you smile at me can please me
You make me think about the pain i've caused, But your still here
The things i fear, you wash away with simple words, And made it clear
So i'll be here, till the end of time, To wish upon a star
I'll spit my heart into this bar! And Trust you know who you are
Girl I must wish, I only need just One kiss to make things right
And we could spend ALL NIGHT, Workin on rhymes to make it tight
We've got connections, I feel i could combine my soul with yours
Your always on my mind! Because your mine! And aint No little whores
Gonna take your place with me, They cant make the face that i see
I smile so hard i get stretch marks across my mouth so quickly
Now i feel it could be love, Infact, It really should be love
Cos Your a true blessing, I aint messing, Your sent from above
All i wanna do is get to know you, Guess you'd call it "JUSTICE"
Your a poet I'm a poet, let me show it while we just-kiss

LADY_LYRICAL 02-05-06 10:36 AM

gud drop - keep elevatin

good use of volcab
flowed smoothli
had some nice multis in ther
made sense
vision depicted clearli

uppin this for a 9.7

Grmsly 02-05-06 10:56 AM

yAY!!!!!! NEAR 10!!!!!!!

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Bonafide 02-07-06 05:30 PM

Nice, not bad man. The only thing i really had a problem with was that the lines were a lil long for me. I saw a few multies thrown in here which is good. The flow was ok, but like i said i felt that the lines were too long. The imagery was cool but u might wanna increase ur vocab a little bit. Please rtf on Runnin' or All I Need, links in my sig. Peace.


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