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Savior 02-19-06 10:45 AM

Day And Night
 
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=2663135&posted=1#post2663135
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2663136

Hmmz Night & day..

The struggle to get through his feelings exhausted him,
she left, but the feeling remained as in a phantom limb
All this sunshine in his life was , a devotion to his pride?
but the counter glow was being replaced by a rainstorm,
Trickled him to a 'wreck' that kept him hidden beneath his core..

He decided to take a walk...

As he was walking, to this valley, the sun went slowly down..
he saw this mountain expandin valleys with even clouds he couldn’t count,
walked toward to the highest peek saw nothing but this glimmer
A mirror of hope found his shining frown above this snowless winter…

Turns tired, so he sits..

As he sat there thinking, on how to make things change..
warm breaths of wind came over his skin and silence was arranged
Then the moon lit horizons & the sun just turned away..
and inside he starts to realize, me trying just pushed her way…

As the night fell, closing his eyes he made a wish..

He opened his eyes in psychological states,
broke free of memory to figure his fate
Saw some glory and wondered why she went away
Nocturnal activities on arrival when darkness swarmed his way
Struggles were tightened the dark was digging his hearts grave
He held his grip in pure spirit hit the floor his strength gave way

If there was a hope…….Darkness..

The devastation of ultimate doom was apocalyptic
looked like it was over, a done deal as life’s entities transcripted..
SO strong to light the masses with an ecliptic visual sentence
a pale light seeped with curtains of mist consuming the earths moon
yet words remained absorbed & stuck in his throat with wisdom & truth..
he had stumbled by this will-o'-the-wisp beneath his innate roots..

Conclusion..

Did he finally find the key to open just a gap to pandora's box
& will the equator be in balance with results of equinox?

I dont know..maybe wishes come true

Savior 02-19-06 10:47 AM

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=222386

Vortex 02-21-06 09:02 AM

nice joint fosho yo... flow was tite.. imagery was cooo
the structure you used gave it a poetic essence...
emotion ran deep thru this piece
nice works

stay1

Savior 02-21-06 07:39 PM

thanx upping.................

Savior 02-22-06 01:53 PM

upping this thayng

Bonafide 02-22-06 02:51 PM

Nice piece man, the flow and imagery were great, the vocab was good too. Like vortex said the structure made it have a poetic look and feel to it, which was nice. A lot of emotion in this, good job man, keep it up. Please rtf on anything in my sig, thanks. Peace.

Savior 02-22-06 03:31 PM

thnx............

Abraxas 02-24-06 07:54 PM

I could've sworn I read this in a site somewhere............

Kawn Flixx 02-25-06 02:09 AM

^Word up ... *searches*

Ysdat 02-25-06 02:17 AM

kids been banned for cheating, so he obviously bit it.

Crazy Hades 02-26-06 12:20 PM

He voted for himself on RV awards.


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