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The Sorrow (0-0) vs. Judicial (0-1)
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Check.
Good luck kiddo. |
Check-in....(Judicial) Topic is gonna be "Lost Innocense"
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Do we have to agree on topics?
Cause if we do, I don't agree. |
lmao...............nah u do what ever topic u want
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No show?
Word Bird Heard Nerd Terd Unless Chest Breast Best Fest Nest Crest Boo Ya What Jea Boo What Chea WORD life. Yeah. |
uhhhh you know showed also.......the deadline was yesterday....so we should ask for an extension to maybe monday because i completely forgot about this battle
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^^yeah vagina...we can just ask for an extension or what eva....and just drop them tomorrow..
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Drop by Tuesday, I'm not going to be online a lot till then because it's carnival in town, three days. Okiedokie?
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"Lost Innocense"
In the 9/11 attacks, Innocense was lost
In the Holocaust , Innocense was lost The war on terrorism, Innocense was lost The attack on Pearl Harbor, Innocense was lost Now when we loose our innocense, there lies hurt pain and regret so many lives were lost, scared for life, and nnot about to forget children & women cryying, tears smearin their lipstick converting to gold diggers just trying to get rich-quick we need to fix-quick they say"ill have the sick-lits from my hollow tips-clip chippin ya lips-bitch" Is this really worth the risk? SHIT being innocent is essential to the surival of special acclaims tactcs being a normal to noble person really doesnt change that the fact-is guilt ends hope, and clouds vision like false superstitions the truth faces divisions, we need to be up-liftin and spiritually gifted We face trouble when the facts are twisted, eating away at our souls like canabalistic-dishes and the harsh viciousness of "Lost Innocense" divides what we have left into increments |
Sweet Pain
When I find myself lost I use the music to guide me.. With a pen and a page to unleash the path deep inside me.. Designing angles to find me, cause with their help they provide me.. To hit the beat with such passion that it's felt world widely.. And now I'm spitting my lyrics to hit the masses with reason.. Laugh while I spring up the charts and watch cats fall like the seasons.. Creating music that's genius, rippin' up beats just for pleasure.. Leave you hooked on my words, but in love with each letter.. I mean my life can't get any better, I got all that I need.. With just stack of paper, a pen, and the mind to succeed.. Filling notebooks with thoughts, speaking through every line.. Because music is life.... at least I've made it mine.. Cause man.. I want to live a life where I just sit about and write .. Creating magic on pages that I fill up every night.. Cause my pen clashes with paper like two stones struck right.. To ignite the page with flames without the use of a light.. Bringing children delight, spittin' lines to raise em higher.. It's my desire and right to reach an audience and help to inspire.. The passion that comes out of writing, and the power of music.. The way we can feel it, and the way we can use it.. |
^^thats not about sweet pain at all lol....but it was good i gotta give you your props on that
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You just didn't look deep enough..
It's about my sweet pain inforgetting about this again and just posting something I'm working on to a title that is vague. |
both were kinda iffy on their topics....didn't get into both, sorrow, you coulda made it seem a little more like, its a pain whenever you write, because you do it alot, or you don't do it enough....but its sweet cause its your pleasure in life....didn't think you hit up that perspective well as you could've, but still, it was good....judicial...i really didn't like your piece...i know it was emotion, had a deep message...but that shits been written to death, been done to death...just boring to keep reading about that kind of shit, like, i want something interesting to keep my attention caught for the whole piece....plus, i really didn't like some of your lines...it seemed like you would try and be poetice and deep, but then you'd have a corny line right after...like, you're trying to make people feel the emotion and hurt and whatever you feel....try avoiding uneccessary swearing, or metaphors that don't really suit the direction you want to take....example "eating you up like cannabalistic dishes"...that didn't suit your whole piece at all...anyways
v/the sorrow, his was better |
Vagina wins....
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