20 bars of madness
 

im runnin wit muderest niggas dat'll take ya soul afta -takein ya life//
buh if i gotta take yur worthless life den im -takein it twice//
stupid ass niggas i'll leave u 2 -mold ina box//
nigga i -told u 2 stop//now u dead bitch n im standin dere-holdin da glock//
ima natural born killa so obviously ima -killa fashore//
i came out n strangeld da nurse wit my -imbilicol cord//
listen dawg i learn frum satan his self//yur a turtle i'll put ya face ina shell//
i'll kill all u mutha fukas ina battle n u say -u da greatest 2 rhyme//
i'll shoot chu inda mouf now u can -comunicate wit da nine//
fukin lil niggas talkin shyt i'll -bust a clip inya soon//
shoot u inda heart den-bust a piss onya wounds//
yo im puttin red dots on dis bitch buh it -aint his period//
my gun blow so loud even -satan hearin it//
wen i run up onu wit da piece i -aint hearin shyt//
ima fukin spycho im -bustin rounds ima shooter//
dun even battle meh u bettah off-shuttin down ya computer//
if u kno da way i am dun think ima -hesitate 2 shoot u//
i laugh death inda face dats probly -cuz im satans peuple//
ima shoot off da semi-auto makein it -rain shells//
im given led poison 2 ya head my clips is killin ya- brain cells//

can i plz get sum feed bak

I saw the word "nigga" 3 times in the first 2 bars.

That is when I quit reading and came to the conclusion I was wasting my time.

u must not hav read much den cuz u used dat word 3 times and i only used it twice in da beginin n 1nce inda middle ..............dumbass

you need to elevate rhyme in ternaly and switch it up dont just do multies
your vocab was average but you need to learn about word use
that is the key but other than that this was straight i give it a 5/10