feed back pleaze
 

Threw da hood n da ghetto//
If u follow m3 ill sho u y dey bust metal// :shoot:
N ill sho all da hood rats//n dead beat dads//
N baby mommas dat sniff crack//
N parks where all da kids play tag //
But dey cant run wit out seein a needle or weed bag// :help:
U need 2 see every thing dat I see//
Den pinch ya self 2 sho u its not a dream// :shocked:
Now ima tell u bout da projects//
N if u aint dead yet// ull probably die next//
Afta dem niggas was killed jux 4 tryna flex//
So u betta n invest n sumthin I call a vest// :thumbup:
U cant expect 2 get a gurl//
Cuz most of dem broads been around da world//
Every gurl is a mystery//
yea she look all clean but every gurl has a history// :hump:
In if u wanna see some cribs//
I can sho u more welfare den a poverty live//
So if u sayin “aint no 1 livin worst as me”
I can sho u a home wit more kids den a nursery//
On dese street every day som1 loosin a life//
U cant walk around here wit out som1 runnin up onya wit knife//
People bettin money on a pitbull fight//
N I watch niggas get shot up ova game of dice//
2 bad dats not mynes but dats my cuzins life// lol :laugh:

This was ok just for a freestyle, but u might wanna make ur lines a lil bit longer. The flow on this was ok nothing special tho, ur vocab needs increasing also. U should add in more multies to make it flow better and some internal rhyming. But try some of those things and get at me and i'll give u more feed aight man. Please return the favor by giving me some feed on anything in my sig, doesnt matta which one. Peace.

Im feelin ya style play boy nice southern feel to it no doubt ~WUN~

thanks man ill b sure 2 give u feed man peace

u Da ILLeST YO .

thanks man i saw u when u dis da disnesy bugs bunny dude dat shit was funny

ight i'ma c real wit ya it was ok but not tha best i've seen if ur gonna talk bout tha geto go in depth wit so i feel ya pain u feel me ...but on tha otha hand it gets 6/10 keep workin on it & u'll get it down soon enuff

yea i guess but yea thanks 4 da feed