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evil paradise.
emotions are twisted leavin the good lifted.
fuckin them up and leavin them dead and drifted. this is a world where even the bad die young. demons jumpin inside ur body with there forbidin tounge. no respect for another weather u black or white. u stare at some one and think u tryin 2 pick a fight. suddenly anger just takes over and u throwin punches. but these gangbangin foolz only jump in bunches. this is an evil world and u have to have ur back. dont think cus u white that ppl gonna cut u slack. ive had my fare share of brutal beatings just cus of that. being white in this hood got me freakin out with a gat. but its an evil paradise we live in these days. i used to get beat so many times u would be amazed. but it aint bout me, its bout how we treat each other. like tupac said treat ur friends like they was ur brother. real friends got ur back no matter wut kinda shit u in. but there are demons in disguise under human skin. so becareful and throw caution to the wind. listin to the whisper that u tend 2 hear within. forget the evil ways, we must change the way we act. maybe if we succede we will no longer have 2 watch our back just somethin quick. hope u guys like it |
Not bad man, ur flow was aight and ur vocab was ok. U should try to increase ur vocab a little bit. For better flow add multies and internal rhyming, but it was a nice topic, something a lil different. But it says u did it quick so maybe u write alot better than this. But please rtf on one of my om's if u havent already. Im hoping to see u soon drop something that u put a lot of work and time, emotion and imagery into it. Peace.
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