Truth = NEEDIN FEEDBK
 

IVE DUN A FEW LINES BUT BEFORE I CREATE THE FULL SONG TO IT I JUS WANT SOME FEED ON HOW IS GOIN SO FAR AN HOW TO IMPROVE, TY



Truth

Beneath motionless expressions, see these eyes burn with rage
Engaged in worldly occurrence distorts true guidance in the way
Of struggling and strivin with empathy towards those that fall away
From the real path of trueness in-faith and act-on corrupted display
That media portrays explicitly, not knowin the outcomes of this game
Till lies elicit large casualties who suffer from falsehood in the name
Of preachin lies on broadcast, makin worlds good seem far more worse
It hurts to witness ones soul rehearse the same-pain reimbursed
Why put our trust on boxes (tv) when truth has stared us in the face
Misplaced our fate with hate from states that paired us into place




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i pretty much like it. it was good. nice use of multies, good vocab. i think it would b a pretty good audio. when u done hit me up with a link so i can check it out.