Retrospection
 

This isn't a song, rather just a short spoken word poem thingy majing. It started out as an assignment for school for the vocab words but I think it actually turned out pretty good. I'm looking for added opinions. Drop links cuz I don't bullshit with my feedback. Thanks. It's the top track.

http://www.soundclick.com/socratesakaphantom

Here's my links.

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2699390

http://community.rapverse.com/showp...387&postcount=9

I'll post the lyrics for those whose who are deaf/don't have working speakers.

Lyrics:
Brothers and sisters, please...I think it's time for a poem.

Doom comes, like a vac-cuum
Because death sucks and smells like a raccoon, or a baboon

Death kill us like crack killed Pookieeeeeeeeeee
...Like Schwarzenegger killed Tookieeeee
Chewbacca was a wookie, revolution.

Overall I think it was pretty dope. :thumbup:

<--can tell your mic is a cheap digi lmao. Learn to mix you lazy shitbag, cuz this could have sounded a LOT better.

Err, for a spoken word track your speakin volume is low. Your annunciation fell off in one spot, lyrics made sense and reached a logical point. Can't really say a whole lot about aspoken word track since it's not like you can judge the flow or anything.

i like it yo..it was straight to me..but yea u was to low =\..and had way to many lo's lol..take some of them out and ull be straight..

I actually recorded this on my mp3 player's mic because I was too lazy to plug in my real mic and mix stuff. :(

Bump and stuff. :(