Black Dragon - Lock & Load, a Rhyme
 

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225008
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=224988
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my latest on Enzo's "Lock Load" from Shadowville Productions.......'preciate any feedback............

www.myspace.com/blackdragonsic
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http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3734068


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beats ok. you kick ya lyrics off nice, flows good, lyrics are simple. last bar of first verse was rushed to get out.

hooks a bit droosy, should of come through more amped/hyped on the hook.

second verse is same as first, same flow, same lyrics. emotion is a bit meh, this track is easy to loose interest based on not much hype and shit.

overall,personally i think you should of hyped it up alot more, gon ewith some adlibs and shit.

RTF on 'million eyes" dedication to god

eh yo man much props on finally givin some feed........'preciate it i mos def got ya song...

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beats tight yo.....

might fix ur reply ratio by replying to others....


come in nice..flows ehhh...kinda choppy...delevery is kinda week...voice is nice...hook is ehhhh...lyrics r basic...2nd verse..ur come in is smooth man...u need to keep this flow all the time...it screws up again wen u say school these" hooks chopy too....ehh..not great but not bad i guess

RTF if y A WILL

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225893

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225406

'preciate feed.......i got ya tracks man............

ok.. da beat starts off alright i kinda like that hard thumpin base wit da orchestra... turn vocals up a bit or come with more emotion ... good flow but your lacking delivery sounds like your reading....thats usually not a good thing.... like i love that hook it could be really good..i would have just put so much more emotion into it make it stand out more you gotta be LOCK AND LOAD... loud on that shit... song had a bad ass concept i just dont think that you spent enough time on it.... if you woulda went through your verse a couple times and fixed up where you were off beat and worked on the delivery it could be a dope ass track...9/10 for the concept 7/10 on actual song... RTF http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=226055

'preciate da feedback.........i got ya track...........